Black Poetry : noise

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  1. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    there's a crazy noise
    in my head
    and it won't get out
    it's warrior bongos
    a tambourine shaking
    a pot a wooden spoon
    two little kids and
    one dog

    no that's not right

    it's the silence
    when
    the t.v. shuts off and
    the lights go out and it
    gets lonely
    because the check i
    wrote bounced and now
    i can't even clean

    there's a crazy noise
    in my head
    and it won't get out
    maybe i'm failing to
    explain truthfully
    or just plain fully

    it's when i dial six
    digits and hang up becuase
    he's not home
    i think
    and wouldn't want to
    talk to me i'm sure
    and what if he does
    then i'll have wasted
    energy since all i
    had to do was let
    him pick up and say hi

    there's a crazy noise
    in my head
    and it's called

    thinking

    i think
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's what shows up in our heads when the nonsense is actually starting to make sense. This was very witty poet.
     
  3. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you could appreciate this.. Thanks for visiting!
     
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    very honest and beautiful
     
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    Aw, girl, I love this. I can relate so very well - I tend to overthink everything. Love the playful style - flow on, flow on.
     
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    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, Prizefighter16.
     
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    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh, Gempis.. didn't see you there.. thank you. I, too, am very analytical. You and me both.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i'm feeling u on dis i've been through it so many times
    very well said
     
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    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I knew I couldn't have been the only one.... Thanks $$RICH$$!
     
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    this had a nice beat to it..feelin ya on dis one sis
    the vibe i am diggin....flow head on!!!!!
     
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