Black Poetry : No, You Come First…

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by waynethomas, Jan 10, 2008.

  1. waynethomas

    waynethomas Active Member MEMBER

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    His tongue twister
    No no no no…
    His
    Tongue will twist her
    To the point she
    Forgets what she was
    Trying to do here,
    As she’s
    Trying to loosen the
    Frustration of day’s juices
    Out of you,
    But she
    Can’t help but just
    Ouse out those cuche coo’s
    And moans only known to you as:

    “Baby…
    Just keep doing what you do…”

    Her
    Slight moans to lick her
    Quicker
    As his
    Tongue flicker
    Causes beats in her
    Heart to quicker
    Her
    Murmurs differ
    To his
    Repetitive tongue flicks
    Riding
    Quivering movements
    With just a tip of pressure
    Applied by the
    Champagne ice blessed between my lips
    Allowing
    Inner hips guide to hidden lips
    To bring back her
    Shuddering state of hips.

    This scene
    Replayed intensely like
    My mid-summer nights dream,
    Elopes this sight now with
    Ice coupled with cream,
    Disappearing down ebony seams,
    Sweat and sticky its intentions
    But my tongue will not allow its
    Wanted retention,
    As his intentions are to
    Clean
    You
    Out

    Of energy…

    You say your coming,
    So what you got for me…?
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Whoa. The pace of this would sound wonderful, spoken. Each line strategically placed, with detailed fire.
     
  3. MRS. LADY

    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    very interesting.........

    yes yes yes,

    lay back and let me
    do the work...

    i'll get mine
    i know how...

    ur love ain't bout 2 hurt..

    i know ur spots...
    i know my spots...

    know how to control my flow
    u come first .. i'm the seductress

    you'll be sayin my name u know...

    your really captured by my eyes...
    and the softness in my touch...

    but don't go chasing water falls...
    because it is you who can't get enough...

    u can be on top...
    i'll take my bottom spot...

    yeah u got me where u want...
    but when it's said and done..... your fire will be hott

    i'm leaving with your energy....

    u sure u got control over ur heart?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Heatwave on da flicker like a french tickler.....work it she come first
    then watch how she open and burst......now what's for thee ready for
    a treat ........only one will know fo sho .....wow this was hot
     
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    I agree this was very hot. Great write.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey
    now this drop was just down right
    nice and juices..lol
    wonderful!

    Peace~N~Love

     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very awesome

    Peace~N~Love
     
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    WayneThomas, I agree with Sis. Watz...I would LOVE to hear this spoken! I hope you could find some time to grace us with your presence so we can truly get enjoy all this piece has to offer....EXCELLENT WRITE!!!!
     
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    when you're finished with the tongue twisting

    don't forget to follow that with the "big bang theory"

    lol

    hot poet

    hot poet

    and you know i like to see a woman pleased