Black Poetry : No Room To Breathe

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  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Have you and I
    resolved to know
    that we've come
    upon a closed passage
    with air seaping
    out so quickly
    leaving no room
    left to breathe

    Have we reached
    the ends' impasse
    when we bypassed
    an untimely beginning

    Can we agree to disagree
    about how you overtook
    my subsistence
    and
    squeezed...leaving me
    airlessly g-a-sp-i-ng
    so hard as to not
    leave an open space
    in my heart
    to compose another
    aspirated s-i-g-h
    of love and relief

    Did you know I had fallen
    into the very oxygen of you
    only to watch as you
    abruptly remove the
    mask from my respirator
    which made me short-winded
    and temporarily
    incapacitated...
    turning
    Code Blue~
    needing
    your love's CPR to be
    revived back to
    a state of normalcy ~
    only to see
    you escaping
    through the ventillation
    behind your own created,
    self-imposed chaos
    because you were not
    ready to inhale me
    completely...
    but I exhaled
    for a life
    with you ~
    whereas you only needed
    a whiff....and a sniff...
    So, I continue
    to search
    for the elements of
    you in the darkness
    of a lost silence
    and from within
    my own
    equiparencies
    when you
    left me in
    tight quarters
    with
    ...no
    ......room
    ......... to -- breathe


    (c) 2001 SOULOFASISTA
     
  2. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dayuuum N2....

    I believe ya tryna take the brotha's breath away up in here!!!

    Makin' me want to breathe ya in and hold ya neva ta worry about CODE BLUE because ya be the OXyGen that sustains me!!!

    Outstanding breath on this flow!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
  3. MapleXtract

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    Abundantly...

    *applauding* your depth, poetess. Very thorough verbals, and a, truly, fitting metaphor... *definitely, feelin' this*
     
  4. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GQ~

    Didn't ya' know GQ? ...Didn't ya' know~~!!

    :heart: ya'~~!!
     
  5. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    MapleX

    Gracias mami....
    for lending me your
    mental for a moment
    to read this piece...!
    Glad to know you enjoyed it!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    O~ME!! O~MY!!
    N2 U DID IT THIS TYME
    STRONG STATEMENT MADE.
    I FEEL YA WITH NO AIR.
     
  7. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$

    Thank you for checkin'
    the temperature of the
    air - up there!!
    Glad ya' liked the read...
    stay tuned!!
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    W..w..w...w...w...w...w..w...w...w...w...

    WoW!!! Inhaling The Vibe...and getting the Oxygen tank reaDy...do I need to say it again? yes, your scribe is outstanding.

    one love,blak
     
  9. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Breathe deeply...

    Or else you will turn blue!!
    And we wouldn't want that to happen,
    now would we!!

    Thanks Cindy!
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Fill up your lungs.....

    Blakman...and when you fill up your lungs....
    I will be there to catch you when you
    explode!!!
    :kiss::kiss::kiss::kiss:
    Thanks baby-baby!!
     
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