Black Poetry : No Other Way

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  1. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ok, guys, here's my third post. Hope U like it.


    No Other Way

    I'm sorry mum for all the pain I've put you through,
    I didn't mean to be a bad daughter, I wanted to be like you,
    All it took was one night mum, to cause all this pain,
    I can't stay another day now, cause I can't face the rain,
    I took another life mum, I killed a little part of me,
    All because of one night and something that wasn't mean to be,
    I'm sorry I didn't tell you sooner mum, sorry I always lied,
    I felt locked behind closed doors, felt I had to hide,
    I know that you were right mum, I should have shown more care,
    Why does the worst always happen? Life just isn't fair.
    I'm too young to have a baby mum, there was no other way,
    But I committed murder, when I walked in there that day,
    I never agreed with abortion mum, now look what I've done,
    Now I have to pay the price, for that night of fun,
    I'm going to leave now mum, go to a better place,
    Where I can leave my guilt behind and finally show face,
    I'm going to miss you the most mum, when I leave today,
    I'm sorry that it is, but there is no other way.

    30/8/01
    *Emma*
     
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    Emma,

    Good piece - sad premise...

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    nice flow of dis sadly show but u wanted momma to know

    u write dem words i'll keep reading
     
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    my dear daugher ... don't ever think that you're alone
    if only you would have trust me ... if only i had known
    there's nothing that can separate you ... from my love
    nothing in the earth or under the heavens above
    where are you going?? ... let Momma comfort you
    'cause there's nothing you can ever do ...

    :)

    beautiful peace ... thanks for joining us and sharing this

    make yourself at home :heart:

    Destee
     
  5. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks heaps guys. Everyone here is so encouraging and friendly, I think I'll stick around for a while yet. :)
    Thanks heaps for the poetic reply Destee
    Love yas all

    *Emma*
     
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    <condenses into a solid and falls as rain>

    I really like the movement and the flow of this poem. But...But...why does it have to be so sad. And melancholy, and guilt ridden. U have done an excellent job of sharing/conveying feeling with this piece. My eyes clouded over and everything. I really need a tissue.

    "For what I am doing, I do not understand. For what I will to do, that I do not practice; but what I hate, that I do." Rom. 7:15

    <evaporates>
     
  7. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If a poem can cause emotion, I think it has done it's job. Thank you Lendof_1_Spirit.

    *Emma*