Black Poetry : No Hope

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by lpoet, Dec 6, 2002.

  1. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I told her of God and she sat
    With teeth clenched tight around
    Her lips as if trying to hold back
    a great cry
    life is so much more than
    what meets the eye
    she told me of times of lying
    with her eyes wide shut
    wishing she was alone in her bed
    but the poor thing
    couldn’t even be alone in her head
    cause everything she thought
    he'd soon decipher and
    in order to forget one man,
    in order to save herself,
    she surrendered her body to all men
    turned away from God and
    gave her soul to sin
    soon after she began chasing
    away her sorrows with
    cheap bottles of gin
    I have no way to save her
    but I'll mourn her life with my pen
     
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    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lp.


    ...this is a powerful & poignant read.
    & i am sitting here taking in the evident
    growth that has possessed your pen.

    ...thank you for sharing, my friend. :)

    alwayspeace,
    elayne.
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    elayne that really means alot coming from u


    its funny cause after going through my old books of poems i realized the same thing myself and was almost imberessed by some of my old work.........

    this poem just kinda came to me i dont really like it all that much
    cause its kinda short but i think it says alot

    thanks
     
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    It's amazing how much you can say with just a few words.

    That's what makes our artistry so beautiful.

    You've definately expressed wonderfully.

    Peace.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed it speaks loud & strong
    it opens minds and hearts of emotions
    dis was deep !
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No, I liked it, cause this poem definitely told a story...yep, and we all know someone like that...at least I know that I do.
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW!

    Superb imagery and depth of empathy, the visualization I got was overwhelming and so real...Means you did a **** good job...when you get old your mind starts to wonder! This poem made me wonder .....WHY?
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!
     
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    Great job, I really enjoyed it!
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks everyone
     
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