Black Poetry : Night After Night

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  1. SoothinDivinity

    SoothinDivinity Active Member MEMBER

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    Laying in my bed at night
    I do this night after night
    You probably thinking....ALRIGHT?
    But look, I keep doing this NIGHT after NIGHT

    My mind wonders about problems in my life
    Why everything aint going exactly right?
    What's my future?
    Am I destined to be somebody's wife?

    Will I ever reach all my goals?
    Are the struggles that I face gonna turn my warm heart cold?
    What's the point to this life?
    Is everthing I do gonna be meet with strife?

    Yeah I lay here night after night
    I think about all the things that refuse to go right
    Then eventually all I can do is close my eyes
    And all those things just disapper

    But still I know that when I return here
    To this place yet again tomorrow night
    actions will replay themselves
    Cause it's a cycle I'm never gonna escape
    And you probably thinkin again......ALRIGHT?
    But really you just need to understand that this keeps happening to me
    NIGHT after NIGHT
     
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    each and every night
    look up to the light
    night after night
    silent prayer will be just right
    to guide ya mind free
    of these things that trouble thee
    night after night
    til ya heart feel just right
    and sure ur be someone wife
    past pain is the future glory
    i feel u and taste your nightly flicked
    problem and know thy God is beside u
    to carry u when u feel & see bleep
    so rest tonight get a peaceful sleep
    ya wonderment will heal ..............

    well felt scribe poetess !
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love the way you make us feel
    the churning cycle of thoughts
    and emotions reeling in the arms
    of discontent and frustration...

    great rhythm...

    Nice work,
    Sage
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece had such a genuine feel to it, and flowed smoothly as well. It's a place that many can relate to. Flow on.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel ya, baby - lifelong worry wart here. The last year or so been tryin to live in the present and let the future unfold by itself, though, and it's a beautiful thing. Many blessings and much peace to you. Great flow.
     
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    Thank You

    Thanks for all the love. Your comments made my day! And gempis I am THE worry wort, that's way I wrote this poem. I'm workin on it though. :)Again thank all of you for letting me know what you think.
     
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