Black Poetry : Nia (purpose)

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  1. theDynasty1979

    theDynasty1979 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i envy the girl who breaks your heart;
    i know she's the one you love the most
    and as long as she waves a finger your way
    i'm invisible; i'm intangible; i'm ghost.

    i cried all night for the things you said
    and wondered what i could not do
    after seven years of coming back home
    to prove my intentions to you.

    women learn to be attracted to the ones they love;
    men learn to love the ones they are attracted to;
    you can fall for this beautiful beast from the belly of hell;
    but i never loved any man but you.

    man was made to self destruct;
    so we inflict plagues on one another;
    eve got adam kicked out of the garden;
    we love no one more than those who make us suffer.

    so should i have lied to you instead?
    maybe cheated with a couple of your friends?
    gotten knocked up by somebody else?
    called you and told you your baby was dead?

    wasn't it good enough that i kept taking you back?
    that i never complained throughout the struggles?
    that i cooked/cleaned/played house with your kids?
    that i helped you out on your hustle?

    the purpose to me is unclear
    why you struck with your poisonous knife
    if you ever loved me or never loved me
    you need to let me move on in my life.
    --peace.MsDy
    *copywrite06/03alw
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    women learn to be attracted to the ones they love;
    men learn to love the ones they are attracted to;
    you can fall for this beautiful beast from the belly of hell;
    but i never loved any man but you- MsDy

    You ask questions that anyone in love would want answers to.
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ****....this is a deep poem.... i like it alot
     
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    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so many elements to this flow
    that appeal to the reader!
    very philosophical, very emotional
    very poignant, and tragic.
    and this on the first read...
    Peace to ya, Poet!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed an eye catcher thanks for this flow
     
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    feeling this piece! There most be another purpose for you!
    Love it !
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man...I seriously thought that this was gonna be a seven princlpes poem....But you proved me wrong in so many ways....
    You have a great flow and it's true like 1poet said....you want the answers that all women in love want :( Deep flow poet... :)
     
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    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Home is where the heart is, but my heart isn't her
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    thats tyte... im feelin u. keep em comin...
     
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