Black Poetry : next to you

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by sraheem2, Mar 20, 2002.

  1. sraheem2

    sraheem2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    with nothing between us
    especially our fears
    I want to stand
    close to you

    so close

    when you breathe
    out
    I must breathe in

    so close

    my left
    can't flow
    without
    your right

    so close

    if you stop
    there's no
    way I can go


    I want to be next to you
    because after you
    the void is
    more empty
    than the snake
    pit I
    knew before you

    and without you
    is a place I can't
    imagine


    I want to be next to you
    so you can feel
    who I am
    because of you

    and believe
    me when I tell you

    there is no woman
    who shines as bright
    and all are
    blinded by the light

    when standing
    next to you

    s


    let me go blind....
     
  2. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thats how i feel bout my girl.........nice flow
     
  3. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is beautiful...so beautiful. But she ain gon let you go blind cuz then you won't be able to see her beautiful face. :)

    I especially like this stanza:

    my left
    can't flow
    without
    your right


    Thanks for post dis un...I enjoyed

    Joyce
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    now i see da love in da air dis was so sweet and lovely
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sraheem2,

    Very nice flow poet!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
  6. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh yes... passionate love...
    i'm all about that in it's purist form!
    this flow is wonderful!
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    poet !

    Extra smoove testimony right here..whoever she is you are lucky to have her..as you well know..by the wordz of this well put prose...tyght !

    peace
    g-man
     
  8. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bravo Poet!!

    Cant get no betta than this!!!

    Reas
     
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