Black Poetry : never say never

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  1. guttapoetfromny

    guttapoetfromny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I should’ve never said never
    now I watch her sit up there and take it like a champ,
    and as I stare in her eyes I feel mine getting damp
    because I can feel her pain
    and I can see her struggle,
    I watch her fighting to keep sane
    god please help me she’d mumble.

    I should’ve never said never
    now I struggle watching her suffer,
    tryna keep the thought out of my head
    of what life would be like without a mother,
    day by day it seems to be getting tougher and tougher
    and only god knows how much I love her,
    no I’m not giving up
    because she wouldn’t give up on me,
    I stand by her side
    holding her hands tight,
    and praying to god that she’d be alright
    but I know she won’t give up without a fight.

    I should’ve never said never
    now I watch them suffer and struggle ,
    watching their only mother lay there with bags of blood hanging from a machine
    running through her poor veins,
    I cope with my little sister while she screams out her brains,
    begging mommy please don’t leave me
    going insane.

    I should’ve never said never
    now I watch tears drop from a grown man’s eyes,
    not hiding his emotions behind some masculine disguise
    all I can hear him saying is baby your not gonna die
    because we got god on our side.

    I should’ve never said never
    I use to think I was different from others,
    hiding my feelings underneath my covers
    now I suffer the consequences,
    now I struggle watching the people I love suffer
    so take some advice,
    and never say never.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the worthy way to say it
    never say never so true u never know what's ahead.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was heartwrenching. This piece was so well written, I could feel the ache. I'm not sure if this situation is actually happening to you, but if it is, or has, I am so sorry, and may God bless and keep you.
     
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    just awesome flowing
     
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    Hi guttapoet,
    And we welcome you in our home, and it's now your home too.
    Awesome piece, I ached and felt every line in this...my heart is reaching out to your's
    this was very deep indeed, thanks for letting us in your heart.
     
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    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    2 many take things 4 granted, not appreciating what they've been blessed with until it is taken from them.

    This is definitely a provoking piece.

    Peace.
     
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    tichaona Active Member MEMBER

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    this was a very heartfelt piece. i felt the pain of the narrator (you if it's a true situation). thank you for sharing.
     
  8. guttapoetfromny

    guttapoetfromny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks alot for your replies. i'm glad to see that it touched you so deeply. this poem was definately written from experience every part of it was a true story. i appreciate the sympothy.
    much love to you all!!!!
     
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