Black Poetry : Neva Foreva More

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  1. Kori

    Kori Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Once weak and unhappy with myself,
    I walked earth as a part or nothing
    Lonliness filled me, n disappoointed w/ the negativity that consumed me,
    I simply existed as a useless entity of the world.
    Misunderstood, unheard, and completely brokenhearted.

    ...never no moreMy thoughts constantly dwelled in the loves and losses of my past.
    Abused and neglected, pity thrown from everyone aroundme.
    I had been deceived, cheated, laughed at and confused.

    ...never no more
    Searching for a means of self-expression,
    I submerged myself in a language unknown to the others,
    Discovered someone who identified with me
    He felt my pains in his heart as if they were his own.
    The sun rose over my life and progress began to bloom
    I came upon the truth; it lies within HE

    ...forever more
    My life is filled with contentment and happiness
    Lifelong friends witness my smile for the first time.
    My heart filled with positive emotions, future plans and LOVE
    Sincere emotion given to me, my heart finally open to return it
    He's content to wait for me in my journey, and our love will continue on

    ...forever more
     
  2. Khasm13

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    i like the progression in this piece
    life lessons learned live long
    in da strong(minded)
    one love
    khasm
     
  3. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really liked the beauty of your piece....
     
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    Sister Kori....

    your style is so eloquent and beautiful...

    the emotion in this piece echoes within each stanza...

    I love to read a piece that draws you into the emotion and experience of its author...

    your work did that for me....

    Keep writing...I'm loving your work!
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kori,
    this is a captivating piece of poetry and so vivid. It carried me through a trail from despair to success. "Neva Foreva More" Enjoyed reading it.

    Peace and Blessings
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was as lovely and smoothly pose'd
    ya pen is graced wit essence flow on
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice pace set here, from darkness to light, this just flowed.
     
  8. krazelyricks

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    This was madd tyte.....much love for this kori
     
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    I love this piece.
     
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