Black Poetry : nerves

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  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    got this nervous feeling
    it’s been with me all day
    feel like a stray
    that’s been trapped in a corner
    heart pounding
    nerves frazzled
    sometimes its heart just gives up and dies
    instead of predator
    i’m feeling like prey
    i look in the mirror my eyes are facing forward
    like a predator
    but my actions are those of prey
    eyes on either side of its head
    so it can see in front and behind
    when the wolf pounces
    when the fox chases
    when the animals come after me
    all i have is my speed
    got this nervous feeling
    it’s been with me all day
    feel like i should eat and ****
    at the same time
    just so that when i have to take off
    i don’t need to stop to go to the bathroom
    and i can run all day if i need to
    nerves frazzled
    reflexes jumpy
    feel like i belong in a zoo
    but then i realize this feeling
    is coming from you
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt sista .......now u know .
     
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    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this...the tone is intriguing. very well written piece. i can hear it being spoken in my head!
     
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    aww thanks u guys! i showed this piece to a friend of mine and he thought i sounded crazy...but he just don't know how it feels to be prey i guess! lol. thanks.
     
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    ****.....I have picked up this sort of vibe from people, and it does disturb my spirit! You vividly depicted the craziness and erraticness of the nervous vibes people eminate. That is one of the worst feelings in the world I swear. I'm feeling just a bit jittery now from reading this piece, so that means you got mad talent for catching the essence of vibes.....now I gotta go work it off......
     
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    I've been there...nice flow redlady.
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Legacy, verb - always a compliment when you comment on my work...thank you very much.
     
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    Way to put it down.
     
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