Black Poetry : need rehab

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, Jul 30, 2002.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    days go by sleeping
    slipping
    into addiction
    and i’m rolling with you
    too much into you
    feel my specialness slipping away
    watching you stick that powder up your nose
    and watch pornography like a sport
    it brings me down
    makes me down
    feel down
    until I can’t cook or clean
    or pick up around the paraphernalia
    oh my god are you sniffing off of the childrens books!
    isn’t that sacrilegious or sumthin
    you don’t care as long as the surface is smooth

    how you get fly corporate casual every day
    go to work with a fresh haircut
    come home and slip into oblivion
    get tired of saving your ***
    but when you sit on the edge of the bed
    and your skin in the light just right setting sun
    you say baby, I’m gonna make a run
    i grab you, stop you, hold you…say don’t do it
    you don’t need it

    but you’re bringing me down
    making me sad
    too much of your life needs rehab
    i ain’t enough to keep you away
    it’s gotta be in your heart to get saved
    how strong do you think I am
    i can’t do this forever man
    I gotta get away
    I need time to think
    you’re bringing me down
    that’s what I think
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    one whom land in the valley of white dust is a downer
    yet one who stay round falls twice as fast
    once da power flowz da show drops to a blissful close
    time to go see ya way out before da bomb go off.
    da future .....dem to a death wish
     
  3. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rich, this is true...sometimes it's easier to save ones self than it is to try to save the one that is falling.
     
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    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow....I'm going through the archives...just looking.....this was deep...
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece hits soul deep.


    Coco :heart:
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i wrote this piece a while ago, and it seemed to slip into oblivion...thanks for recognizing it.
     
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    sometimes we just do not know what to say to such a vividly real peice, but we hope that the Lord showes you the way to cope or flee.
    God bless
     
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    red.


    ...this one took my breath & moved me.
    it felt real-ly real... the imagery was too too
    vivid... well done poet!! i enjoyed... much.

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
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