Black Poetry : NATHANIEL'S BLUES

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  1. afrostotle

    afrostotle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    “Consumed with lies…His peace of mind hides behind the memories of his bloodshot eyes, thus, his son… with his painful scribe… labors on with devotion…as…the TRUTH… struggles to free Itself… from the chokehold... of his... raw emotion.”

    Nathaniel’s Blues
    What fate… dread or destiny
    now awaits… as… his
    life of strife…nears the end of
    Its span…
    Of course he…like most others …
    aspired to… prosper and live long…
    Or…at least…that was
    his plan.

    “It seems like only yesterday”…
    “I was young and strong”…and
    “All the other… marketable measures
    of a man.”

    Tricked by his mind…
    Only to realize…time…
    was not on his side…
    Now he’s…
    Sidelined by sadness in his-
    twilight-years- too…
    weary to weather the madness
    no…one last stand
    So… he… ... sits
    Mentally shackled… the toll of his years…
    struggling to maintain and keep
    sane as…
    best as he can.
    His…trials and tribulations…
    tracked by his… sun-soaked tears…
    As his pride… seeps through the seems
    of his… cracked hands….

    Will he…
    drift peacefully into an…
    Eternal bliss to be… greeted
    With an angel’s kiss…and acknowledge
    The divinity all… earthly subjects are
    Required to behold…?
    Or…
    Does he…collapse from being chased…
    by the pains of his past…
    ”Run…Black Man…Run”
    His greatest challenge…
    Saved for last…
    For now…
    He just sits…
    Singing the blues…
    While attempting to mend… his…broken soul?


    Peace,power, and Prosperity
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed it shall be
    this was awesome read and well displayed
    tyte scribe
     
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    To have many more years behind you than ahead of you, and to feel despair, must be awful...you expressed this feeling so well in this piece. Very well written.
     
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    Many A mans tale!!.....

    Heavy!!.. lovely tight flow!.....
     
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    Yes...Thank you for the plug....This is for my stepfather....whom is 60yrs old, an ex-2xfelon, no education, and a job that is moving to Japan....Nothing new...the blues that is..for black folkes...but I feel his pain everyday..although I am 2200mi from Chi-Town.....This was for him and anyone else who can relate to the Real Blues....One Love
     
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    this was awesome
    i was well in this lookin for more
    i so enjoy reading you
    thanks for sharing
    peace
    Angel
     
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    Wow, I was touched by this tale, and now am ever more so considering it is based on your stepfather. So nice to see you back, afrostotle.
     
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    Brother...
    your soul is so empathic...
    reading you is the experience
    of touching...you and your life
    momentarily...
    this was heart and soul wrenching...
    your words are always so real

    you are what my poetic mentor
    refers to as a "Brave Poet"...
    because you let your words cry...
    and I feel it every time...One love
     
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    this peace dug deep
    in a mans soul...tyte dun...a sad portrait painted on point...
    one love
    khasm
     
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    Thanks Khasm13...Nuff Respect Due!...My "Pops" is having a hard go at it...I wish there was a way I could relieve his torment...but unfortunately, all we can do is be there as much as humanly possible..and pray..One Love

    AngelicSage...Respect...all big up to the Queen...Thanks...but I wish I could be as brave in the flesh..as i am on the page...One Love
     
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