Poetry Critiques : N***er In Your Eyes

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  1. ANUK_AUSAR

    ANUK_AUSAR Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am a ****** in American eyes
    My wants are not real, but concern's caricatures-

    Animated madness,
    glazed-over with a sweet honey-barbecue sauce
    In a dirty dish doubling as an ashtray
    For my incinerated opportunities
    And the blunt-guts of dismay.

    I m a n***er in American eyes
    My needs are never explained
    So they fade into the sloppy gravy
    f my aforementioned artifical wants and
    Unrealistic scenario A's-
    For which I never plan,
    Except to happen upon them
    In a narcotic stupor:

    You know, between three scratch-offs
    And next week's binge at the MGM
    I figure something's on cover these **** hospital bills
    Because my once-famed alchemical fortuity
    Has taken on a life of its own.

    Able to transmutate white owl, white wine and white hoes
    Into yellow teeth, polka-dotted purple liver
    And red-hot piss
    Crack rock is my Philosopher's Stone.

    I am a n***er in American eyes
    And nature is a cruel broad.

    M chick? Gave me the proudest shade
    So a shade of arrogance covers American eyes
    To the seriousness of they exploitative ways.
     
  2. Khasm13

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    whoa...graphic visual images protrude throughout this piece...
    it would be nice if it was longer...but other then that
    i can't add any additions that would make this phat-er
    u did that thing on this joint poet....props

    that crack rock line was classic...

    one love
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    you are that u are this was nicely done
    each line kiss the next ..flow on !!!
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :cry: I havent read a piece like that around here since :cry: *sigh* its been half past forever! That was a wonderfully executed piece/peace and the reading experience ALONE should be cause for folks to read it :)

    :star: :star: :star: :star: :star:
     
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