Black Poetry : Mysfunction

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Inque, Sep 14, 2005.

  1. Inque

    Inque Active Member MEMBER

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    I hate it that you love me
    And the way you do…
    Smooth,
    Rich,
    I love it...

    So I hate you

    Melt me from the outside in
    Like butterscotch
    Thick
    Slow
    That’s how you do
    And I love it…

    So I hate you

    When we fight
    I scratch, you bite
    Flush against the wall
    And it’s on
    Yeah, that’s how you do
    And I love it…

    So I hate you

    A wild drumming
    Rhythmic splendor
    Dance in fury
    Sweet surrender
    All in a language been around
    Since the earth was green
    You speak it to me like you always do
    And oh I love it…

    So I hate you

    I hide my core and yet you find it
    Again
    And again
    And again
    You steal me from my self and mind

    And how you move me
    Above,
    Behind,
    With me
    I love just how you do…

    So I hate you

    I hate you

    I hate you
     
  2. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    interesting scribe....makes a lot of sense to me....;)

    keep flowin...

    one love
    khasm
     
  3. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A wild drumming
    Rhythmic splendor
    Dance in fury
    Sweet surrender

    That was a smooth *** line and I loved it. I loved the concept for this poem and you presented it in very good form. Nicely written.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    great twist of warmth & bliss
    still deep mentally kissed
    awesome write ....point made.
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice flow...thanks for sharing.....

    Peace
    Angel
     
  6. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Inque, welcome to the family
    Wonderful piece poet, I enjoyed reading you
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Being helplessly in love and there's isn't any help in sight. I enjoyed this piece poet, especially the part about melting you inside from the outside like butterscotch...great image. Welcome to Destee poet, hope to read more from you.