Black Poetry : My time ( put it in the wrong prefix) lmao.. srry

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  1. Poetic*Phattie

    Poetic*Phattie Member MEMBER

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    You have absolutely wasted my time!!! ...

    Feeling like a criminal that has never committed a crime....

    Running away from my future, but monagomous to my past...

    My world is so still, while time is moving so fast...

    Weak in areas, I'd rather be strong...

    Gathering information from pedestrians who were obviously wrong....

    Misunderstandings leads to unnecessary arguments...

    Causing harsh feelings and years of torment...

    Clarifying situations of which I'm unfamilar about...

    Leads me to my insecurities and doubts...

    Amongst my peers, I'm invisable... Future expectations no longer exist...

    Cutting my self mentally across the wrist...

    Confusion has replaced commensense...

    Trying hard to create some sort of defense...

    Locked in lies without a key...

    Not able to become the woman I've strived so hard to be...
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    I like the releasing rant and the charged conviction! :toast:


    My favorite line was "Cutting my self mentally across the wrist."


    I felt that and could really relate.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    freeing self from da tales of da past and knowing da differents will allow self to move forward
    to better days i love how you express this whole feelin here ...well felt
     
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    Greetings and welcome Sister Poetic*Phattie,
    I can sure relate to this piece sis, thanks for sharing and looking forward to reading more.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Thank you the piece that was in the wrong place i took care of it for you !
    which was the same as this one .
     
  6. Poetic*Phattie

    Poetic*Phattie Member MEMBER

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    aww thanks so much guys!!!!!...
    im just learning how to work things here.. so im going to post more today... thanks for the opportunity to express myself, and for it to be heard :SuN030:
     
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    "You have absolutely wasted my time!!! ... "

    that line grabbed me...and led me on this journey into your soul. i know... "Misunderstandings leads to unnecessary arguments... Causing harsh feelings and years of torment... "

    keep striving to become that woman...even though i think you're already there.

    the river floweth
     
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    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Powerful piece. continue to strive, you will succeed I hear dedication in your words and a will that will not quit.
     
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