Quiet Poetry Lounge : My Tears Flowed onto Paper

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My tears flowed onto paper
    as I thought of you, the dam burst
    and all the feelings came streaming out
    raw thoughts that haven't been rehearsed
    Naked am I, thoughts laying unclothed
    bare, face wet with so much care
    it exists, baby, it's unbelievably real
    perhaps even stronger than it's ever been, there
    in the pit of my being, feelings that are exploding
    outwardly as I weep, not out of sadness
    but out of the sheer emotion that I am longing
    to express, beyond bliss, beyond gladness
    My spirit cries out to you
    hear me, feel me
    as the emotions are soul deep
    I am ravaged by them internally
    If you look closely
    You can truly see
    My tears flowed onto paper.....
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm not sure how to even begin to respond to this
    An emotion that hits your soul like a tidal wave
    washing away everything in its path...forcing one
    to see it, become one with it, hear its cry for completion
    although...it's in the form of poetry, this is not poetry
    it's not just words...it's the beat of a heart, the stirring
    elements of a soul

    ~ A bare expression flailing in the wind
    for its lover...to see and follow it home.


    mmmmmmmmm....Girl, this one was like lightning striking in the soul! Whoa...
    u got me on this one
    Sage​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed this was well heard and felt through da tears
    very deep emotional scribe
     
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    If you look closely
    You can truly see
    My tears flowed onto paper


    This piece is so deep, one need not look close to see, hear or feel you to the core of it all. I can relate to this feeling and I love the way it bursted from within...beautiful piece.
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My sista sage...I tried to convey thoughts flowing onto paper, to know that you felt them so deeply, humbles me, truly. Thank you.
    Thank you for letting me know this piece was heard and felt brotha Rich.
    Queent, thank you, I appreciate you telling me that you could relate to this scribe sis.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I don't know what to say, sister girl. This is pure beauty in raw form, and I really feel ya.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Didn't mean to render ya speechless gempis. :) Just decided to let it flow raw for a change. Thank you sis for your constant support.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte write uppin dis one here
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for revisiting this piece Rich. Your support is much appreciated.
     
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