Black Poetry : My Sunset

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Our bodies touch each other
    Like clouds in the soft blue sky
    A perfect shade of orange w/yellow to tie
    The finishing of white preparing our mood
    I feel as the purest person around w/ no attitude
    He whispers in my ear
    As into the evening sky we stare
    I'm overwhelmed w/ so much love and joy
    Because he now knows my heart is not to be played
    w/
    It's not a toy
    He hold me tighter but soft
    As the grass caresses my legs
    So I lean my shoulder more into his chest
    Where my head touches his face
    And a cool breeze just floats by
    W/ God's approval of him answering my cry
    The sun goes down as the stars come out
    My evening is to end well w/ out a doubt
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very nice sunset, to sunrise back to the setting of a beautiful day. I enjoyed reading this rapture piece of poetry.
     
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    this gave me such a warm feeling of comfort.. loved this.. thanks poet
     
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    Loved the images you flowed with, they were very serene poet.
     
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    this was a nice i enjoyed the flow
     
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    sweet scribing love what u bring

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    May this sunset last forever
    so you can make the moment last...

    Beautiful flow!
     
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    oh i do like this poem
    it was like a water color of caresses
    filled with warmth
    wonderful ...yesssss

    Peace
    BlueWater
     
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