Black Poetry : My spirit is paralyzed!!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Andreattah, Jul 26, 2004.

  1. Andreattah

    Andreattah Active Member MEMBER

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    I lie awake in my space..
    my time..my venting space..
    Everyday battles that leave the same scars
    Looking out..
    It's quite blurry behing these mental bars
    No a soul i see,no a soul i hear
    Seems like time just froze
    But i continued steppin'
    Never a distinction of whether i was leaving
    or coming..

    Pain in my knees
    Putting me on reverse mode
    The strain in my eyes precluding my vision
    Fickle relations being the central factor
    ..putting me under pressure
    See,from a woman I BECAME
    And into a woman I BECOME

    My days are devasted by confussion,misunderstandings
    of battles already fought
    Prevailing never became the issue
    but then look at my scars..
    They still bleed

    I made a deal with my herat
    Took a giant leap of faith
    Ended up hearing classic songs that have never been written
    I made a deal with my heart
    Got an open heart surgery
    Didn't know that the demons would come crashing in
    Yes,its true...
    A RAID took place in my HEART
    and it left my spirit paralyzed!!
     
  2. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Andreattah nice script enjoyed it but let me drop this up in here

    You spit lyrics wise but your spirit is paralyzed
    With the stroke of a pen the smoke will begin disguised
    As writing, with damp clout you could stamp out problems
    Camp out and mob them like Indian scouts, you can resolve them
    To write sincere can strike fear into cats, so keep clear stats
    I’m a freak where the beer at?
     
  3. Khasm13

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    welcome andreattah...
    i hear you on this joint...the heart
    is the bearer of many weights...you
    expressed yourself very well on dis piece
    please feel free to drop more poetry whenever you like...
    for you are home now...
    one love
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    str8 awesome flowing
    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the fanily of peace and love
    very nice look to read more of u soon

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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome to destee.com
    very nice flowing, enjoyed the read

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    Peace
    Angel
     
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    Welcome, dear Poet. I enjoyed the drop. Looking forward to more. Find a spot, get comfortable. :coffee:
     
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    Sometimes no matter what you do, the heart remains fragile and open to attack. I hear ya, keep your flows coming.
     
  8. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    For Andreattah eyes only

    Andreattah, welcome to this planet
    may your life here be as stable as granite
    Im sure you'll find the air breathable and fresh
    but remember your surrounded by poetic flesh
    A sensitive lot they be, you know how poets are
    creative folk, some can even take a bad joke
    So take some time and read the rules
    then go and scintilate like the Queen of england's jewels


    Andreattah, Seize the day
    great poem you have made!
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yo, this was a cool read if I must say so myself. Welcome to Destee's. And I look forward to seeing more of u.
     
  10. Andreattah

    Andreattah Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanx

    I'm humbled to be among all of you...y'all are the finest!!
    Poetry found me last year and since then i haven't stopped writing.
    When you can write
    You become your own shrink
    Reject the loony bin
    For the conscious mind touches the soul

    Thanx :toast:
     
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