Poetry Critiques : MY SOUL

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  1. Mario D King

    Mario D King Active Member MEMBER

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    My Soul
    My pen is a symbol of my soul, when I write it releases the tension
    that is destined to inspire…
    To uplift and pivot your spirits, to bring a means of brotherhood and togetherness
    that shall not expire nor retire…
    Like Nasir Jones only needed One Mic…All I need is One Like…
    And watch me take flight, as the heavenly Father guides my hand,
    as I know it’s his plan, so I shall move at God Speed, with no other needs,
    but to believe and achieve…
    No weapon formed against me shall prosper, therefore I am proper…
    like a noun, so capitalize my Fame when it’s set and done…
    I already told u once, ain’t nothing new under the sun.
    You can keep your materialistic thoughts of success, as long as my soul is aligned…
    with the Most High, I got a poetic buzz…Now that’s what I call HIGH!!!
    As the Angel’s cry from the sky, to wash the erosion from Mother Nature…
    I shall continue to share my soul every time this pen touches the paper…

    One Love!!!

    Mario D King





     
  2. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Bro. King, I wish I could give you a THOUSAND "likes!"

    I LOVED IT! :great: (but signified my most favorite parts)

    ....Being the former English teacher I am, I have only one "critique."

    Edit "God speed" to "God's speed" and you're ALL good! :toast:
     
  3. Mario D King

    Mario D King Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks...And I will be sure to make the edit.
     
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    Great write and i agree with sistah Cherryblossom but over all ya pen was on hit
     
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