Poetry Critiques : MY SOUL

Mario D King

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My Soul
My pen is a symbol of my soul, when I write it releases the tension
that is destined to inspire…
To uplift and pivot your spirits, to bring a means of brotherhood and togetherness
that shall not expire nor retire…
Like Nasir Jones only needed One Mic…All I need is One Like…
And watch me take flight, as the heavenly Father guides my hand,
as I know it’s his plan, so I shall move at God Speed, with no other needs,
but to believe and achieve…
No weapon formed against me shall prosper, therefore I am proper…
like a noun, so capitalize my Fame when it’s set and done…
I already told u once, ain’t nothing new under the sun.
You can keep your materialistic thoughts of success, as long as my soul is aligned…
with the Most High, I got a poetic buzz…Now that’s what I call HIGH!!!
As the Angel’s cry from the sky, to wash the erosion from Mother Nature…
I shall continue to share my soul every time this pen touches the paper…

One Love!!!

Mario D King





 

cherryblossom

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My Soul
My pen is a symbol of my soul, when I write it releases the tension
that is destined to inspire…
To uplift and pivot your spirits, to bring a means of brotherhood and togetherness
that shall not expire nor retire…
Like Nasir Jones only needed One Mic…All I need is One Like
And watch me take flight, as the heavenly Father guides my hand,
as I know it’s his plan, so I shall move at God Speed, with no other needs,
but to believe and achieve…
No weapon formed against me shall prosper, therefore I am proper…
like a noun, so capitalize my Fame when it’s set and done…
I already told u once, ain’t nothing new under the sun.
You can keep your materialistic thoughts of success, as long as my soul is aligned…
with the Most High, I got a poetic buzz…Now that’s what I call HIGH!!!
As the Angel’s cry from the sky, to wash the erosion from Mother Nature…
I shall continue to share my soul every time this pen touches the paper…

One Love!!!

Mario D King

Bro. King, I wish I could give you a THOUSAND "likes!"

I LOVED IT! :great: (but signified my most favorite parts)

....Being the former English teacher I am, I have only one "critique."

Edit "God speed" to "God's speed" and you're ALL good! :toast:
 

Mario D King

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Bro. King, I wish I could give your a THOUSAND "likes!"

I LOVED IT! :great: (but signified my most favorite parts)

....Being the former English teacher I am, I have only one "critique."

Edit "God speed" to "God's speed" and you're ALL good! :toast:

Thanks...And I will be sure to make the edit.
 

$$RICH$$

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Great write and i agree with sistah Cherryblossom but over all ya pen was on hit
 

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