Black Poetry : My soul gently weeps

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by twision, Apr 13, 2004.

  1. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My soul gently weeps
    In trenches
    In valleys
    For you
    For you and me together
    For the bliss we can create
    I can take away your loneliness
    Effortlessly
    Replacing it
    With passionate love
    Taking away
    The world
    Leaving only you and I
    You search
    I have
    You ignore
    You overlook
    You run
    I cry
    I want
    I offer
    In vain
    Wanting to touch you
    Shelter you
    Love you
    Rebuild you
    *sigh*
    Yet all in vain
    Because you're blinded
    You're preoccupied
    You're distracted
    Basically afraid
    I'll back away
    Remain silent
    While my soul gently weeps for you
     
  2. thatgirl74

    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Woo. I am loving it I am loving it.
    Nice work. I feel this . Yo Flow!!!! :luv:
     
  3. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Woah that hit me dead in my face! :laugh:
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hot: :hot: YEAH YEAH YEAH Im definitly feeling this
     
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    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *whistles*

    man this is the one-hitter quitter :hammer:

    classic for days to come
    jh.
     
  6. angelicsage

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    an arrow straight through the :heart:
    this was so deeply emotional...
    a person has what they're searching for
    right in front of them...and can't see it
    ....... :cry: :cry: :cry: this piece cries...
    for the lost one...and for the love denied
    I loved it...
     
  7. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for feeling this!

    That girl74- Glad you feel me on this one! I probably feel you more :luv:

    Sensual reality- My bad. Wasn't aiming for the face....more so for the heart....thanks for the love

    The one- Thank you. I'm glad you know where I'm coming from....keep scribin'

    J'HIAH- Right in the face...WV style...shall we make them all believers??

    Angelicsage- You just don't know how true your comment is! Yet another thing my heart must get over...in time, in time! My piece cries alright...you mind wiping away the tears? Much love and respect2U my sister!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, to hunger and have to remain famished...Your words draw us in, flow on poet of the week!!!
     
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    amberly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i felt this, really good lines from beginning to end
     
  10. PurpleMoons

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    Heart felt!
    Loved it!
     
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