Black Poetry : My Sad Song

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, May 9, 2003.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    verse:
    All i can feel is raindrops
    even tho the sun is shining thru
    I haven't seen daylight
    since the that day...(sigh) that i met u
    i stare off into space, watchin the door
    I keep replayin the scene in my head- she says "i cant stay anymore"
    and thats when the tears start to flowin...

    Bridge:
    ur pictures surround my bed
    love letters surround my room
    still life is living more than me
    i can still smell ur perfume
    come back, come back...

    Chorus:
    shes gone... and im alone
    i never wanted nobody else and i still dont
    shes gone... why didnt i give her what she wanted from me
    all she asked 4 was some time, some affection, and honesty
    ill change... ill do anything
    all i ask is 4 u to come back to me...

    verse:
    i haven't eaten in a week
    i never answer my phone
    i just stare at the caller id
    pain only heals when alone
    music plays on repeat, our favorite song
    u said u would never leave, no u'd never move on
    baby... these tears wont stop flowin...

    Bridge:
    ur phrases surround my head
    ur laugh echos thru my brain
    ur moans have been recorded in this room
    memories that u and i contain...
    come back... please come back...

    Chorus:
    shes gone... and im alone
    i never wanted nobody else and i still dont
    shes gone... why didnt i give her what she wanted from me
    all she asked 4 was some time, some affection, and honesty
    ill change... ill do anything
    all i ask is 4 u to come back to me...

    adlibs:
    i didnt know pain like this could dig so deep
    i never knew u would get up n leave
    i know ur tired of me sayin sorry 2 u
    but baby livin isnt life w/o u...

    nobody, i dont want nobody
    i just want u...

    one more chance, thats all i ask
    ill give u it all, just come back...
     
  2. serenti-poet

    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that's so sad but beautiful poet I really like this one almost makes me wanna cry dayum gurl keep flowin I like ur work. peace and blessins keep flowin
     
  3. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you. i wanted to do sumthin different, so this came to mind. enjoy! much luv n respect...
     
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    poeticlyspeakin

    Nice...very nice.

    Don't worry...in time, things will be ok. You can stop :cry: and :bawling:. All you need is a :grouphug: and much :heart: from your Destee.com family.

    :thanks: for sharing

    :toast:
     
  5. cypher

    cypher Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah i can see the pain and passion flowing all thru this one....people can u relate cuz me, poet and the destee fam is livin in a luvin mind state....luvinursoul
     
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    yes, sad indeed......but very tyte........much love :)
     
  7. ASHANTA

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    You are an excellent song writer you should think about taking it a step further. There is a lot of money out hear for lyrics as this. This is really nice.
     
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