Black Poetry : My Romance (unfinished-ruff cut)

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  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was an emotional invalid
    an emotional illiterate
    with the word EVOL spinning
    in my head cause love backwards
    to me was revolution in reverse
    before she and I conversed on that
    glorious day and she evolved into
    the penumbra of my mental moon
    and the thoughts I have of her
    I gave to her as momentos to
    wipe herself off with on hot
    days in June this evolution
    into melanin linen holding
    her passion in a liquified form
    had me recitin' the requiem
    for my loneliness that she wrote
    I called it psalm number 151
    cause the way she made me feel
    it had to be biblical / and
    caused me to sing her a Song
    of Solomon...

    "And the roof of thy mouth like
    the best wine for my beloved, that
    goeth down sweetly, causing thy lips
    of those that are asleep to speak"

    Her voice goes down deeply into
    the canals of my aurals and stirs
    my spirit 'til it cries watering
    and watching my desire for her grow
    into a garden of Eden for she is
    Eve and I, Adam / the first man
    the first woman / she my rib / me
    her tomorrows she looks forward to
    /rising over the edge of the
    horizon naked in night's garment
    I open my arms and cover her
    in the blakness of our soul's
    solstice converting two into
    one the synergy of our energy
    is a fantasy of discoveries and
    we explore with the end in mind...

    ...that when she I we die / one
    another will be the last reflections
    cast on our eyes.


    (c) 2001 blakverb
     
  2. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ****

    i read this to my girlfriend and all she could say was **** is he single?lol man... you done done it this time!
    -7
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak~

    mmmmm....has me thinkin'...

    "emotional invalid", "emotional illiterate"
    "Psalm 151" -(well I know it as something else, but
    I guess I'll keep that one to myself) :)

    heavy; intriguing; passionate...an illumination
    of you - through & through~

    I see I'm going to have to read and re-read this
    one, cause it's gotten under my skin into the
    "thick-of-things"!
    This isn't a Kodak Moment; it's a PROZAC moment, because you
    are driving me absolutely nutty (in a good way) with your scribes!
    Well written prose.
     
  4. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wildflower7 - sister thank you. your words always make a brother smile.

    N2 - a PROZAC moment...now that reply is classic! You know (I'm sure you do) there are only 150 psalms in the bible. but the one she wrote was priceless! but that other 151 *burp* excuse me Shhhhh!

    queens thank you, blak
     
  5. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak~

    Well if all this caused you to "sing her a song of Solomon",
    then the cat must have YOUR tongue or your vocal chords! -hheeellloooo <<echo>> empty echo's are all that is heard from the valley below...
    Instead - I hear Juliet reciting "Romeo, Romeo - where for art thou?" But I don't think he can hear because he's too busy clearing his throat from the burn *(151) preparing a dilluted song!!

    How ya' like dem apples?
     
  6. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THIS

    is amazing work! The WHOLE of it....

    but I can't get enuff of:


    " I open my arms and cover her
    in the blakness of our soul's
    solstice converting two into
    one the synergy of our energy
    is a fantasy of discoveries and
    we explore with the end in mind...

    ...that when she I we die the last
    reflection on our eyes will be one
    another."

    You know THATZ Right! :)

    A
     
  7. 8th wonder

    8th wonder Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    3 words.....
    uh..uh...uh....
    (((((dizzy)))))

    illumination......
     
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    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now this is what I'm talking about....Scribe on brother!!!!!
    Keep this flow going....
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak...My Brotha!!!

    You can call it what you want but I call it intellectual brilliance!!!!

    Ya mental gift is like that!!!!

    Respect
    GQ
     
  10. MapleXtract

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    Oh my...

    You have, truly, transformed me into a hopeless romantic! :lovestruc *Truly lovin' this*
     
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