Black Poetry : My repairing lotion

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  1. PoeticManifesta

    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I looked into the mirrior today,
    looked at my face,
    my childhood years left its mark,
    chicken pox scars, once were dark;
    teenage years,
    popping pimples was a daily routine,
    As a woman,
    with more cracks in my heart,
    than a Crown Heights sidewalk,
    My face is dry,
    hard,
    mean.
    As a black woman,
    Im a third class citizen,
    All this reflected by this face of mine,
    I look at the mirrior,
    wash my face,
    hoping to wash off he years of scars,
    pain, and discrace,
    looked at my repairing lotion,
    wondered, with its money back guarantee,

    would ,
    If i put it on my head, repair my mind,
    smooth away the misery,
    If I put it on my chest..
    would it turn back time to
    when they wernt so big,
    but full and bouncy,
    if I put it on my tummy,
    repair it to before I met mr fudge,
    and his ho-ho's,
    Swallow it,
    so it could repair my genes,
    for future generations,

    Then i started thinking big..
    put in in all this bottled water,
    everybody drinkin like,
    its the fountain of youth,
    it could..

    Repair the family unit,
    Repair the Democratic Party,
    Repair Bushs' broke mind,
    repair the peoples pain,
    show that theres sunshine,
    beyond the rain.

    After applying my potion,
    face bright and new.

    Then I turned my bottle around,
    and It said "NOT FOR INDIVIDUAL SALE,"
    I exhaled,
    there goes my dream!
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bravo

    :deal: This right here was the real deal indeed! :darts:
     
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    What a concept poet. The way you brought this, first dealing with personal demons, then public ones. And the ending, so witty. This was marvelous!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow................ i love this what a tyte drop here
    i see y you are such a great poet
     
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    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You are the wind beneath my wings...

    Thank you all soo much.. Rich ofr your neverending support.. watzinaname.. for your dear comments.. and carmelpython... you always tellitlikeitz'.. btw i thought i once saw ur pic in the photo album.. where is it these days?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    likewise .........most welcome
     
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    Awesome piece, I enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing
     
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    tight drop enjoyed this read.....
     
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    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    glad to make ya.. :slobber: smile!
     
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    this was so awesome....you are extremely imaginative...I love the way you use your talent into your poetry
     
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