Black Poetry : my queen

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by hisili, Oct 28, 2004.

  1. hisili

    hisili Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Itz tha way she moves her hips and tha way she licks her lips
    Itz just.....
    intoxicatin' got me trippin, I had too many sips
    she is...
    so captivatin', elevatin' my heart rate when she walk by
    so I...
    gotta holla at tha gurl I can tell by tha look in her eye
    that she..
    kno I wanna piece of her, I kno she wanna piece of me
    and I...
    ask her name, she just smiled, she replied my name is Tiffany
    I was…
    taken back by her sweet soft voice, a lil’ ghetto but thas iight
    cuz I…
    am feelin her style, dealin’ me emotions that I just cant fight
    cuz she…
    haz me fiendin’ to taste her lip gloss, self-control I have lost
    and she…
    keeps me dreamin bout her, will stay with her no matter tha cost
    she says…
    she stay wit me cuz I treat her lyk a queen and, neva am I mean
    I say
    u r a queen u stay fresh and clean, sxcest woman I’ve eva seen.
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was red hot and full of compassion ....very nice keep flowing
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice dedication of your affection to your queen, i am sure it doesnt go unnoticed.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This read was so genuine and smooth. I'll bet it's even better when read aloud. Someone from voice chat will probably tell ya that. Enjoyed the flow.
     
  5. MzMelanie2u2

    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lovin It C..!

    :smooch: Ummmm...Can anyone direct me in the direction of where I can get mah name changed...I was thinkin something along the lines of..."Deseree"...lol...lemme stop. But seriously, im really feelin this piece, I love the way you enabled me to feel your true desire for this girl...the attraction in here is so strong....Love your work..."Keep Em Comin"...1​
     
  6. queentswana

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    hi hisili ...
    and welcome aboard the ship. It's good to have you here, and I enjoyed reading about your "Queen" ...thanks for sharing.
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so sweet
    and pure...
    the best kind of love
    the beginnings of love

    Nice work poet!
     
  8. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yea...

    this is hot. kinda reminds me of sumthin i wrote awhile back. peace n love...
     
  9. Khasm13

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    yo... a queen is a queen...
    thas easily seen...tyte scribe son
    one love
    khasm
     
  10. naujae

    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a queen for you, a king for me like it so much i thought i was fallin in love but for this is tight
     
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