Poetry Critiques : My Poem

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by BlakDestiny, Oct 15, 2005.

  1. BlakDestiny

    BlakDestiny Member MEMBER

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    In The End

    We too often differ our dreams
    Because we are not allowed to participate
    We are creators, inventors, artists and writers
    But we are denied the opportunity to share, all because of hate

    We do not want to beg, borrow or steal
    When we ourselves have the power to heal
    We need to unite, strategize and organize
    To strengthen ourselves and improve our own lives

    What Happens to a Dream Deferred? Ask our brother some years ago?
    When our talents our dreams and our creativity are denied the right plateau
    We redirect our energies, grow discouraged and internalize our ability
    We become victims of violence because of neglect and lose ourselves in misery

    PL
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com critique workshop
    were clean honesty is given
    welcome to the family of peace and respect

    This was well written , every stanza and on point
    surely this one can be a speech of our history
    love the flow look to read more of you soon welcome !!!!
     
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    Thanks $$RICH$$...much appreciated.

    Just trying a little sump'n. I do have a couple more and will be happy to share.

    Thanks again!!
     
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    please do ....your very gifted ....flow on !
    and most welcome happy you here to share.
     
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