Black Poetry : ~~My Pain~~

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  1. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm joining fellow poet in writing poetry from a Woman's P.O.V so let me know if you all dig this.
    Peace and Soul.

    ~PropheticNsyght


    running water...

    There it is on the sink.
    Antiseptics...
    Peroxide, Alcohol, Neosporin and other s***!
    I'm standing there washing my face gently...
    There's a cut beneath my right eye..
    a deep, unsightly gash that congeals.
    When will I learn?
    D***! this alcohol stings.

    What will I tell people this time?
    "Oh, I just slipped and fell..."
    "No, girl, I was up walking around the house in the
    dark and I stumbled..."
    Girl, give yourself a break.
    How long can you live with this?
    How long can I live with this.

    When will I grow up and learn?
    He did it the last three times and this
    is only the first year of marriage!
    Can it get any worse?
    Hell, I don't even want to find out...
    So why do I keep running back to him?
    Why do I continue to believe his smoothly
    spoken lies?
    Why do I lie to myself?
    Constantly?
    Continuely?
    I'm so...so...tired.

    sighs...

    I'm applying a bandage to it,
    but who will apply a bandage to my broken
    spirit?
    I can still hear my mothers voice.
    "Girl, don't you know he ain't no good for you?"
    But I didn't listen, and why not?
    Because I have all the f*****' answers thank you very much!
    I know my men.
    I know that this only a phase.
    I know that things will only get better.
    It's always darkest before the rain...
    I know that I am full of so much bulls***, that
    it's funny...so funny until I just cry!
    Lord! What am I supposed to do?
    When I love this man?
    I love him, but I can't continue to fool myself and
    live with the abuse.

    Copyright 2004
    ~PropheticNsyght​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well pose'd this was felt and on point
    goog luck on the writting with the P.O.V

    it's a nice write
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much pa for your love. I appreciate you greatly. God bless you love.
     
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    ....yes, I've always loved
    your ability as well as your courage
    to write from different perspectives
    of the sexes and personas...

    you scribed this quite well...
    you were definitely inside the mind
    of a victim...
    and all I kept seeing...were faces
    of women I've know who've stood
    in that mirror...

    Thank goodness for awakenings...
    they no longer stand there anymore
    and most of all they understand
    that ...Love shouldn't hurt

    Thought provoking composition...
    Peace, Love and Blessings
    Sage
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    most welcome and likewise
     
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    You do a great job writing under a different point of view. It can be hard to admit one has made a terrible mistake, but to save ourselves, sometimes we have to admit just that. Well written piece.
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you mami, you are simply too beautiful.
     
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    Love hurts, but it shouldn't bruise.

    "She" had me wanting 2 help pack "her" bags.

    U did your thing with this.

    Nice.
     
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    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was posed very well, im very impressed, you displayed a very heartfelt and realistic mind in this piece, very deep brotha

    keep the flow goin...
     
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