Black Poetry : My Love

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  1. jus_dat_nice

    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He lifted my spirt
    Until i was sitting on the back of angel wings
    Where I could reside with the King
    My love
    Joy filled the air as I experienced rapture
    When his voice danced an intoxicating beat on my eardrum
    He penetrated my virginal heart
    And allowed me to love
    He delivered me from hell
    And sheltered me against the demonic grins
    Of cross-eyed grim reapers
    On a quest to kill my joy
    My love
    He helped me laugh in the face of despair
    And find its amorphous form comical
    He used his majestic strength
    In a metaphorical sense
    To break the chains and release me
    Free at last!
    Taught me why the caged bird sings
    He dismissed the material
    Exposed the spirtual
    And claimed he was willing to survive on
    Just his tears for water and
    My love
    He became my saving grace
    Pushed me off the ledge
    Calling it a leap of faith
    And I fell into his arms
    Where he was able to disarm me
    Weasel his way through my various defenses
    And claimed a monopoly on
    My love
    Took me on a flight of fancy
    To a place of fantasy
    Similar to the Garden of Eden
    And we could just enjoy one another
    For eternites on end
    Where not even the brief interuption of death
    Could intervene on the space of time
    Where all we need is to exchange breaths
    And even the silence of our respiration can expresss
    My love
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    now dat real love in a footnote to free yaself into
    If i had someone to give me dat kinda love with all my love we would be untouchable

    This was so dearing / lovely and beautiful i really enjoyed this ...let me read it again wow!!!
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you $$RICH$$
    Everybody needs somebody to love right?
    And once you got that you dont need anything else but him/her
     
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    sho nuff right !!!........well i better start looking round i'z need me somebody to love
     
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    oh my....this was such a gorgeous write

    I could feel the tribulations of my own life, through your written word. I really felt you inside this piece....away from the noise of the world,in an intricate place of your heart and mind.

    Your love....is the breath of an Angel so Lovely.



    I am going to email this to myself....very inspirational.
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you apple*pie
    i'm glad you enjoyed it
     
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    really real

    i enjoyed the ride

    i liked this part especially

     
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    To have this kind of love, wow, a love that lives on fathoms past the last breath. Poetess, this was absolutely beautiful, and genuinely posed.
     
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    jus_dat_nice - This is a gem. Be proud. It's a masterstroke of poetic intimacy infused with visuals to pull the reader in for just a peek and then to usher the reader out breathless but remembering and wishing for more. Only talent can do that. One of the best I've read in a long time and crafted with a beauty that only comes from the true poet's pen, heart and mind. You did real, real good! HH
     
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    thanks for reading
    im glad you enjoyed it
    Much love


    thank you a lot watz
    i really was trying to capture that limitless love that so few are lucky to find
    and fortunatly i found mine when i was just in high school :)
    i appreciate the love
    thank you for reading sis
    much love


    thank you so much harry
    i wouldnt say that i was all of that but i appreciate the compliement a lot
    i try my best though and im glad you enjoy my work that much
    thank you again :)
    Much love
     
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