Black Poetry : My Life Jacket

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by howardtsu, Jul 22, 2007.

  1. howardtsu

    howardtsu Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Eve tightened her grip

    before i could slip away into the night

    i was frightened that her hips would trip up my intentions to skip away before her grip on my heart became to tight

    to lightened up my intentions to dip her Doritos into enough salsa to hear our cries of passion rip through issues black and white enough

    for anyone to see clearly

    that any time she's near me

    i'm in heaven



    love,

    howard
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Enjoyed the word play here, you're certainly smitten, and there's nothing wrong with that.
     
  3. PurpleMoons

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    Awww, This was so sweet!

    Don't fight it Brother, go all they
    way to heaven!

    :heart:
     
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    You know Howard. I love your style, here. Everytime I read ya it's like reading ya journal or diary and I like the way that you include the reader into your thoughts and make it personal.

    You got me at the end when you said, Love Howard.

    I was like, Awwww!!! I felt like the letter was to me or I could see myself writing the letter too.

    Alright.

    Read ya later.

    -Desert Storm
     
  5. howardtsu

    howardtsu Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    especially with this kitten watzinaname :shades:

    i'm trying purplemoons :em2300:

    thanks desert storm :toast:
     
  6. GHETTOAMBITION

    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow
     
  7. howardtsu

    howardtsu Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks ghettoambition :em2300: :qqb003:
     
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    nice n short
    but i like it.
    peace poet
    one luv.
     
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