Poetry Critiques : My Kind of Perfect

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  1. LovesDestiny

    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ok, I'm a new member so be gentle Black People...(I'm looking forward to your comments)...

    “My Kind of Perfect”

    Flawless…ideal…whole…complete.
    Perfection means more than an image we strive to be.
    The picture of perfection looks just like you and me
    but rarely is it ever discovered because the package can be hard to see.

    From new born babes to mature adults we think we know the source…
    of happiness and fulfillment in life’s magnificent course.
    Some women say perfection is tall, hard-working, sexy and fly…
    others say its all about the benjamins and how it benefits our life.

    Men see perfection in hips, eyes, lips and thighs,
    big ghetto booties and full, perky racks that catches everybody’s eye.
    But perfection is not about images, bank accounts or good looks.
    My kind of perfect is a gift from God and more intelligent than ten thousand books.

    My kind of perfect is beautifully tanned.
    His skin is radiant and his stature strong because he represents the Mother Land.
    A mind so intellectual and a heart of pure gold,
    He’s meek and humble because he knows his future God holds.

    Fun, witty, laid back…humorous, sexy and sharp!
    This is my kind of perfect because his essence has captured my heart.
    No false pretenses, unrealistic expectations or anger he never spouts…
    My kind of perfect loves me for me…flaws and all…from the inside out!

    I don’t have to fight for affection or struggle for attention.
    “I love you” flows from perfections lips easily and freely like the waters in Lake Michigan.
    My kind of perfect does not judge me unfairly or treat me unkind.
    Even in our disagreements perfection never ceases to stimulate my mind.

    I love perfection and perfection loves me.
    Even though our situation isn’t perfect it is what it has to be.
    For this short moment perfection and I must be content
    in the friendship that we share because it’s relentless.

    But our short moment will soon pass away
    And we’ll be free to exercise the truth of our love, not just on occasion but everyday.
    I’ve never been so sure of anything more for this one thing I strongly predict.
    One day soon my reality will include just me and My Kind of Perfect!
     
  2. FattnBeautiful

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    Beautiful write. Everyone has his or her own idea of perfect. The way you described your perfect was well perfect. I enjoyed reading this.
     
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    The pace of this piece, was so fluid, your word choice was quite sharp, hence, the message was conveyed like crystal, with such clarity. Perfection can't be measured in this way, what matters is what's perfect in each individual's eyes--so true! Loved this write.
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    in perfection of a perfect mate u pictured it to a max very lovely write

    Welcome to destee.com poetry forum where a poet can be a poet
    welcome from above as i bless this wit love very nice look to read more of you!
     
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    "My kind of perfect is a gift from God and more intelligent than ten thousand books."


    I'm feeling your kind of perfect...... nice flow!
     
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    LovesDestiny Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank You!

    This is the first time I've ever let anyone read my work. I appreciate your constructive criticism and your warm welcome...I'm proud to be amongst such talent!!!!

    HopelisRomantic
     
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