Black Poetry : My Heartache (it's kinda vulgar guys - sorry)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by molasis, Feb 19, 2005.

  1. molasis

    molasis Active Member MEMBER

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    It's over
    This time I swear I'm ****in' through
    Sick and tired of loving you
    Feed up of being your fool

    Yep, this time I'm serious I'm done
    Enough with pretending to love me just for fun
    Being my friend is the closest to me you'll ever come
    You're going to end up being the lonely one

    ****, it took me long enough to wise up
    I will no longer be drinking from this empty cup
    "Girl, I never stopped loving you!" shut the **** up

    As far as I'm concerned there is no need for you and I to speak
    About the old feelings we once shared; it makes my heart weak
    "I think we will end up together!" is the conversation we have every week
    Once again this type of relationship is not one I wish to seek

    To be honest I think you were scared
    Cause you know the love I could have given you would have never been compared

    Instead you chose to be with that silly ***
    Dang, I never knew you would stoop that low
    But you're young you have time to grow
    Don't even think about rebounding with me because the answer will be NO

    Suddenly our past and present has created a huge distance
    A romantic love for me and you is non existant
    You know what, up until now I've been persistant
    What the **** do I look like your **** assistant

    Baby you and I will be great friends
    True buds through thick and thin
    I wish I would have known what I know back then
    Then I wouldn't have created in you a safe haven

    You know that I love you
    For you just about anything I will do
    Just like I said before I'm tired of being your fool
    And the thought of loving you, again, is over and through
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i hear ya sometime we all have to make a choice
    so one can hear da voice and move on love can
    hurt and leave a taste like never before tired of the crap!
    i feel ya here................flow head tyte expression
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow! Girl let those feelings be known!!! This was tight
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You spoke out clearly, I didn't think it was vulgar, you were just expressing yourself. I appreciated the in your face style, and I hear ya on this. Flow on, release.
     
  5. molasis

    molasis Active Member MEMBER

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    Wow, thank you to everybody who responded ... this was my first piece and I'm glad it went over so well
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to Destee Molasis

    Heartache is one of the first things released when writing poetry. This is a very good poem. Keep flowing and sharing your talent.
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was so real. I felt your pain sistah. Madd props sistah. Oh, and it wasn't too vulgar. It just made the piece even better. Again, I loved the piece. Can't wait to read more of you.
     
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    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Tru....
    We do need to vent these feelings
    And ur ventilation was well done...
    Even tho ur situation
    May not have been the best one...
    Be strong sis.
    Good write
     
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    Nisa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Flow on with your badself...
    Im feeling this..
    Sometimes you just gotta do what you gotta do... :welldone:
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome welcome :wave: and GET IT OUT NOW lol

    whew be free and let the pen heal you :read: :)
     
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