Poetry Critiques : My Guilty Pleasures

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LeeStone, May 9, 2008.

  1. LeeStone

    LeeStone New Member MEMBER

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    Connected levels of connections intertwined by two- way streets to dead ends.
    Yet
    Still a connection
    Leading to a path of lust filled destruction

    His body loved mine like he co- wrote it

    Revitalized sensations of newfound pleasures
    Flood
    My senses as I linger in a
    State of
    Pure Satisfaction

    Interaction
    was just a fraction
    of a caption
    resulting from our attraction.

    *~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
     
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    truetothecause Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Um, um, Humpf!....
    Throwing down white towel!

    You gwan gayl
    :bowdown::bowdown::bowdown:

    M.E.
    :hearts2:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    All roads eventually merged into a fiery connection. I certainly enjoyed how you penned this reflection. On to read your next piece...
     
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    phynxofkemet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i want more....

    i like your style, this teased me into wanting more.
    Especially the line His body loved mine like he co- wrote it! Hmmmm.... it's like that? !
     
  5. LeeStone

    LeeStone New Member MEMBER

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    thank-you...that's so funny you say that you wanted more. When I posted this, I kept thinking something was missing...lol. I thinK I might just sit back down with this one and add to it.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaa! heat wave it could have been longer , had my mouth watering for more
     
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