Black Poetry : My Good Old Friend

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by jdj530, May 12, 2004.

  1. jdj530

    jdj530 Active Member MEMBER

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    Hey I say as a girl name lilmay walks up...I say hey she say hey is for horses hi and hello is for people...so I say hello how do you do? She say do I know you...then I say you may not recognize me I done changed over the past years, you hear...I done changed can't you see...do you hear me or is it just me...tell me something for me to know that you notice me...I guess not but I know you..and you should know me...you're my good old friend lilmay from da hood...well since you can't hear me I better do my part and depart...As old friends we are you shouldn't be far from where I live so see you soon,whenever you get there..my good old friend you.

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    love the rhythm
    it just read so smoothly
    and kept my attention
    as I hung on to each
    word to find out where
    the conversation was going...

    Lots of originality...
    Love the style and
    the concept...

    Great Read! :toast:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very smooth scribing sweet pen u rollin wit
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You brought the reader into a scene, this flowed very naturally, I'd like to read more form you.
     
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    uppin dis again ......tyte write
     
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    u know, u really shouldn't be such a stranger, come by more often dammit, u know u are missed here..lol...anyway loved the poem, write some more soon....
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    :geek: thank you all for loving my work...I wanted to change my style a little bit...I have more commin so when it comes check it out ok... :thanks:


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