Black Poetry : My First date

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by beautifulblkw, Feb 6, 2009.

  1. beautifulblkw

    beautifulblkw Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sitting on the step patiently
    watching the cars go by
    dreaming of him wishing he was already here
    the smile on my face
    is one that cant be replaced
    listening to the children sing the song that's in my heart
    wondering how much longer we will be apart
    the only problem is i don't know who he is
    tall short
    light or dark
    ...It really don't matter long as he plays the part
    will he sing the song of peace and discovery as i
    will he hold my hand hug me and cry
    will he whisk me way
    telling this world goodbye
    is that him i think i'm ma died
    help me out please what should i say
    i think he's coming
    i hope it's to stay
    ok ok I know what to do
    i got this, I'm sure of it to



    wow he's just how i pictured him
    handsome as ever
    but full of sin
    no longer excited
    feeling very unsure
    it's really ashame i don't want him around anymore
    he held my hand i started to cry
    he whisked me way i wanted to died
    he sung a song of his sorrow and pain
    said mine was fine cause i've always live this way
    he said i'm your friend believe in me boo
    but i got a new family I gotta do what i gotta do
    a harass reality but so very true
    the day i met my dad and lost him to !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    :em18:

     
  2. free2b_me

    free2b_me Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :toast: I really like this piece sista, a story I know so well...
     
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    o'my my i truely can relate to this for i too walked this path and know it so well
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    sad true

    we all feel your pain

    trust me

    your version is one too many

    on why it's like that but sadly that's the way it is

    for some reason
     
  5. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A heartfelt piece...

    I wasn't expecting that ending. Sadly there is that 'little girl' inside of many women who share similar sentiment.

    We are not responsible for another's actions, but we can try to minimize the impact it has on us. I've decovered writing helps sort out feelings.


    feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco:dance:
     
  6. beautifulblkw

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    from da heart!!!!

    yes you all are so right many have this these feeling lock ,stored away inside of them. the only way you can ever really be free from the pains and heartaches of life is to admit that that what they are .........
     
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    A Story

    BlacKsoLuTely BlackTaStiCallY Told
    :bowdown::toast::bowdown:
    My Spirit rode the waves of Sadness and Fear* Energy in Motion"Deep" down

    *Fear in the form of excitement as opposed to terror.....excitement is the beginning or lower level....first base on the fear scale with rage being the other end on the scale...

    and now I have a complete sense of the experience of "bittersweet"....


    Thank You for Sharing!

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  8. Clyde C Coger Jr

    Clyde C Coger Jr going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    In the Spirit of Sankofa!

    My First date





    I piggyback the sentiments of Abena, beautifulblkw, a very powerful piece!

     
  9. epiphany

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    I love your vision in words....it was touching, poetess.



    epiphany:heart:
     
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    Like coco, I wasn't expecting that ending. I felt such pain in these lines, so disappointing to be let down that way. Potent piece poetess.
     
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