Black Poetry : My Fallen Soldier

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  1. choclatangel

    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To a soldier lost before his time
    The love we shared exceeds all binds
    Mental as well as physical ties
    Even though you're gone you spirit will outshine
    Many of the friends you leave behind

    In the wrong place at the wrong time
    I never thought those words would apply
    Standing over your casket all I can do is cry
    How can so much in my life go awry?

    The days are long and the nights so cold
    No more laughing or talking on the phone
    I can still feel myself being held in your arms
    Hearts beating in unison, bodies prone

    We never made love, sharing only kisses and hugs
    Strictly platonic but so much more
    Our hearts melded sharing pain and love
    Two bodies, two hearts one soul

    Our love never had a chance to blossom
    My immaturity and your insecurities led us to fail
    Now I'm forever stuck in this mental jail
    Of what could've, should've, would've been

    Your death has taken a piece of my being
    Seperated for long but not for eternity
    I'll hold your memory near and dear
    Until we shall meet again...I love you

    Jihad K. Avent

    R.I.P.

    August 2005
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    felt you and the emotional ties of missing that someone ...
     
  3. GHETTOAMBITION

    GHETTOAMBITION Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    im feelin dis piece of a lost one
    the hurt dat it leavez a soul in
    very deep and emotional
    i luv it


    blackluv and bp
     
  4. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what a fine dedication to the men who laying down their life for the world. flo on poet.:welldone:
     
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    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...

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    ~Ikoro
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Swet, sad and compelling--nufff said--Amun-Ra
     
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    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very Sorry for your loss, but this piece displays the most important thing in the world. that is
    "LOVE NEVER DIES."
    Lovely write sista.
     
  8. choclatangel

    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :blowkiss: Thank you all so much for all of your comments. I miss my soldier, best friend, lover, big-brother...his life was taken way too soon.:luvv:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can't be easy, knowing that there will always be questions...why. I suppose you have to savor what you truly had, and it sounds like you had a treasure in each other. This was quite touching.
     
  10. smoothsoul

    smoothsoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel your pain, I myself have lost someone in this madness also. Much luv sis.
     
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