Black Poetry : My Exiestence , My first Attempt Any feedback will be apricated

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  1. People_Power

    People_Power Member MEMBER

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    MY EXIESTENCE


    My life, it’s my life, and it’s one big lie
    I’ve sinned and begged and trod on people to get ahead by only a few
    I’ve lost hope and I’ve lost my pride
    But the love I have burns deep inside
    Some of us are not that fortunate to live Silver spoon in hand
    And I may not be that smart
    But I’m not dumb enough to see the world and see everything it stands for
    And the people that tread in it from up here which seems like they’re pathetic ants
    Love I’ve had my fair share of gain but my debt of loss too
    I’m not asking for sympathy but hope to show others that people suffer from pain besides you


    Everybody has skeletons in their closet
    And everybody has had their equal slice of the finest American Apple Pie
    Disasters that occur and shred your heart and make water stream from your eye
    Flint constantly staying in your pocket
    Fast food, drugs & alcohol which some people have no control over consumes their every day life.
    Nobody willing to talk and persuade but more willing to hate and envy the man that has less then them to make themselves feel better
    No bread or no cheese not even water to drink
    We all have had times that are rough
    But that doesn’t mean you should hate or have an empty heart
    Death calls us
    Don’t be scared
    From dust to dust it’s quoted in the good book which proves their naivety of heaven
    But the true fact is that we all live in hell
    Survival of the fittest Darwin said it well
    It’s true because it’s the cold hard truth which most of us don’t take too well


    But why tell a tale if nobody is listening
    Well perhaps in faith the truth will prevail
    And in the final hour of mans destruction everyone will agree that we’re all
    Scavengers, Murderers, Plunders to a degree
    That’s why when my judgment day calls
    I can go to heaven or go to hell and not dwell on the question why
    But rest peacefully
    Be prepared
    And do my time for the next life which will pass me by
     
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    :wave: :wave: welcome!! great to have you here, and looking forward to more of your flows.
     
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    :wave: welcome to destee... :wave:
    enjoyed your flow...hope to read more..
     
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    You went deep on this one andI enjoyed the ride nto your thoughts!
    Keep writing and Iwil keep reading.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
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    Welcome!

    But why tell a tale if nobody is listening
    Well perhaps in faith the truth will prevail...

    profound verse...
    very conscious piece.


    Welcome!
     
  7. People_Power

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    Sup guys

    thanks for the incourgment im going to try and write one poem a day
    and post it . Also thanks for the kind welcome . i should have another poem up in a few minuts .

    One World , One Love
    people's
     
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    great also drop some love on others
    in support as we rise together ....nice reading u
     
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    Welcome!

    nice flow... deep...
     
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