Quiet Poetry Lounge : My Devil vs. My Angel

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by arthur1210, Apr 20, 2008.

  1. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Why did she come here tonight?
    Why is she wearing that dress?
    Why does she keep staring at me?
    Like this is some type of test?
    Why am I pondering these thoughts?
    Of these interests I cannot confess?
    Why does the angel to my right say no,
    While the devil to my left says yes?

    I’m thinking of troubles in my home
    While, I’m seeing all of her charms
    Thinking of how good it could feel
    Yet, feeling how it can create harm
    Accountability giving me warning
    To my right, I can hear his alarm
    Yet, temptation keeps on pulling
    To my left, keeps tugging my arm

    Her gaze at me stays consistent
    Now, she’s even giving a wink
    The voice in my left ear saying, “GO!...
    She wants you to by her a drink
    A little wine and a little conversation
    Following your masculine instinct"…
    But, then I here the voice in my right ear
    Reminding me to, “Think!...”

    "So much you've built to be destroyed
    With the little satisfaction gained
    So much of life you live at stake
    When you’ll barely know her name
    Will you gamble with the vows you made?
    Or will you find it in yourself to refrain?
    And will you be able to save your home?
    When it comes time to explain”

    To my left I hear, “See the sexy smile?
    And the precious soft brown skin?
    She’s promiscuous and she’s tipsy,
    You can see it in her how she grins
    You know she’ll take your hand
    If you decide to extend
    If decide to take her home,
    You know she’ll let you in”

    Then in my right ear again I’m reminded
    “This is a game that’s hard to win
    Somehow skeletons like these
    Fall out of the closet in the end
    Creating contempt with your Lord,
    Because it will be a sin
    Creating divisions in your home
    That may be impossible to mend.”
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a piece that's so worth spreading,
    We soon come to know that "Death looks good" ...if death looked like "death", who'd go near it.
    Thanks for using ya head brother, cause I know you did...QQn
    Awesome drop poet!!
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your devil has an alluring argument, but your angel's argument tries to save you not only for the moment, but for the long haul. Convincing write, well done poet.
     
  4. MRS. LADY

    MRS. LADY Banned MEMBER

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    this is well written!!!!

    KEEP RIGHT!
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Soooooooo
    TELL ME! TELL ME! TELL ME!!!!!!
    I KNOW You held on to your heart:heart:

    This Was simply wow factor
    You kept it so stright....it was mellow but had so much depth
    You Know what it means to Rock your flow

    So Flow on

    Okay Okay, I wont Bother you....
    So, You did the right thing RIght????
    :D
    Peace
     
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    Sunshine 888 New Member MEMBER

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    That was really nicely written. I enjoyed that. Thanks
     
  7. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I could feel the tugs from left the right and the tension was thick and juicy as the temptation that the nararrator was facing. The end had a great release because you were untied by the spiritual understanding that a bad decision could lead to sin but the good one led to the purest joy of keeping the stronger bond alive. Well Scripted Scribe!
     
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