Black Poetry : my destiny

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  1. pinkfighter

    pinkfighter Member MEMBER

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    my destiny

    i'm gazing carefully at the stars
    as my thoughts wonder
    i start to ponder
    is destiny written in the stars?

    I'm imaging your hands
    tracing me, skin to skin, ever so softly
    needing the details thus moving slowly
    ending with intertwined hands.

    do you see how, again and again, you consume my thoughts?
    waiting to sleep, existing in my dreams
    always centre of attention it seems
    i am always escaping reality for my thoughts...

    I'm consumed with everything of you,
    it's you now that i only see
    the one who will embody me
    right now, only thing i want is you

    i shall, without much of a choice, wait for you patiently
    even though the present seems meaningless
    I will, just for you, bare it regardless
    sitting by this screen waiting for destiny, patiently
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    The whole was a sweet piece, but this particular line really struck me:

    That evoked beautiful daydreams for me.


    But, again, I enjoyed the whole even though the last line was a shocker.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a lovely write poetess. And for me, that last line was unexpected. Some folks do end up making a love connection from online though, if both parties are willing and able to take that chance.
     
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    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow, This is a very passionate poem of longing and wanting, of needing and hoping. Hope it works out your way.
    Bless!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    you pen a beautiful picture one i can look at from the inside out awesome scribe
     
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    hopes and dreams...

    ...of wonderful things...and the future they bring. THAT'S WHAT WE DO. we hope for the things not seen...and dream of the day when all things will come to be.

    peace&manyblessings
     
  7. pinkfighter

    pinkfighter Member MEMBER

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    thanks

    I didnt expect such a response at all. Online crushes :uhh: are not a good thing. And it wasn't like i was looking for someone online, it sort of just happened. i've moved on though...
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey pink I thought this was a good read
    and frankly the DESTEE.com CRUSH thread is one of the most popular threads here on the board lol
    So I think youre just fine :)
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The Mind and Heart are immense things....They are what harness Destiny. You write beautifully sis.
     
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