Black Poetry : My Deepest Apology (please people help me)

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  1. Beautiful18

    Beautiful18 Member MEMBER

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    This is something I'm writing off the top of my head. My closest friend/ex lover just got into a heated moment last night and I said some messed up things and i'm being told that it was the last draw for her and she no longer wants my friendship, i'm tryna tell her i'm sorry but how do u say sorry when someone doesen't want to hear your apology, how can you make them hear what you have to say and mane them understand. This is off my head if anyone can help me with a poem to give her please feel free to just write it hear.

    All I remember was being so in the moment
    that what I said or did didn't matter to me
    I never stopped to think about your feelings
    or how speaking with out thinking
    would be the destruction to this friendship
    I've heard through mutual friends that it was the last draw
    That you can't go on being friends anymore
    I honestly don't know what came over me
    All I know is after I said what I said
    there was nothing but silence coming from
    both of us
    my silence because I couldn't believe the words
    that just came from out of my mouth
    and your silence because you couldn't believe your ears
    I called you a joke said no one in life would ever take you serious
    Said that when we were together you was just something for the moment
    I said so many messed up things that I don't want to even discuss them
    We always said from strangers to friends to lovers and back to friends
    that you feel what I feel...and I feel what you feel
    but right now I feel like I hurt you
    betrayed you, dissapointed you
    I don't know how to apologize, because I've always had to much pride
    but for you I can say i'm sorry, I apologize
    I can't see myself loosing this friendship
    Wev'e been through too much
    theres been times when you have said hurtful things
    and I have forgiven you
    So I hope you can too
    I'm walking around laughing with everyone
    acting as if its not bothering me
    that I can't pick up the phone to call my other half
    I'm sad, and dissapointed and ashamed of myself
    I know it may take time for you to forgive me
    So I just want to send my deepest apology



    I don't know what this is, it isnt a poem I guess, i'mm tryna find an apology poem or write one but I can't and i'm hurtin can ya'll help me
     
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    just relax and be correct
    be real and let what u feel
    go and surely your words will
    blend to the deepest heart felt
    lines ....but with that said we don't allow links in poetry
    or such surely many will leave a line or two here
    so i did remove it .
    allow God to guide u .
     
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    It sounds great to me, beautiful18. You are being honest and coming from your heart, and you can never go wrong that way. Just be pure in your intentions and let your words flow. I give you daps for your courage.
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Beautiful18

    It's perfect. :D

    :toast:
     
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    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You let out your soul...aint nothing wrong with that

    Trust me, you can get through this, friendships can be forever, if you want them to be.

    Great poem again

    keep the flow goin!!!
     
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    the best apology poem comes from what ever is on your mind and off your chest. You don't need us to tell you how good it s. If it's from the heart, it shoulf be deemed forever excellent:)
     
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    I find that when we hurt and I mean a deep hurt. That hurt is our poem our expression that we want to convey towards that hurt. All those tears, those thoughts and the apologies are all words to the poetry piece from your heart . No other things, words, or other poetry pieces can take away from the truth of the heart. You have apologized so u have done what u could do now wait on it and if she doesn't accept your apologies than as hurtful as the thought is it may be time to move on.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Like those who responded before me have already said, you wrote this from the heart, so what could be more expressive than that? Also, some people need a cooling off period, a chance to get over, or at least come to terms with what has been said, or what has been done. Allow this person some time.
     
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