Black Poetry : my daily self-evaluation

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :deal: Just a lil' sumthin i wrote this morning when i woke up cuz i was bored!!! Enjoy! :deal:




    i stare in the mirror,
    pinching the skin around my stomach
    molding it into the ideal shape.

    i wish that i could look like her,
    the girl in the magazine
    i compare our hair and teeth
    our skins our lips.

    with every look my self esteem vanishes
    losing confiedence, my smile soon fades and my
    flaws,seem endless and numbered ,as i quickly fall
    into a state of sadness and put on a baggy sweat
    shirt ,concealling my dreams and pretending i dont
    care.

    slowly and realistically i begin to accept my
    image and idenitiy repathing to myself that i am
    the only me, and that is a good thing!!! :spin: :x: :spin:






    {hope you like. please tell me what you think!!!}
    thanks
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well scribed u created da emotion in motion
    flow on !
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice scribe enjoyed it
     
  4. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thnx ya'll :toast: :geek: :rolling:
     
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    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    BlatinaPoet4u

    Nice drop. You had me in your thoughts with you.

    :thanks: for sharing.

    :toast:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think many can relate to this, and you ended it on a positive note...nice one.
     
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