Black Poetry : "MY corner....

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  1. AppleBottomBird

    AppleBottomBird Member MEMBER

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    On my corner of 6th and pine
    N*ggahs are selling everything from souls to dime
    bags that is..

    On my corner at night,
    everyone and there mama are ready to fight
    cause the saying goes..freaks come out at night.

    On my corner you got
    young kids selling there bodies for cash...

    On my corner there are
    sewers filled with rats...

    On my corner that i walk pass everyday,
    you got mah BLACK people asking for change...

    On my corner in the middle of the day,
    you got hustler's trying to get paid....

    On my corner,
    you got black men who are ready to steal your young daughters S-E-X..

    On my corner earlier in the morning,
    you got business people trying to kick out the blacks and move in all whites...

    On my corner...
    Well i just live on the corner...
    I try to put back together the pieces...which keep falling apart...
    But that's just on my corner....
    Question-How's your corner???????
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm on the corner of "Conscious Ave.& Awearness St."
    Yet, it's the corner where the druggie's meet,

    A corner where our children cry from hunger pains
    the same corner they drag our men off in chains

    The corner that the Po Po put a bullet in ya head,
    On that same corner, I seen our black man dead!

    Somebody gave this corner the wrong name,
    cause most of us truly messed up in the game.

    Great piece poet, there's more corners out here...than time.​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    not just ya corner corrupt
    from the mess and junk
    mine too fill with da westside crew
    pushing da ying
    as womaen giving the yang
    my corner will be controled
    from the shame
    i feel all this and the street corner of destruction
     
  4. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Okay this is a dope piece but here is a little critizem, constructive critisim try to stay away from repetiveness... It takes away from the poem. Also go into what you are saying what about the hustlers on the corner. What are they doing?

    On my corner
    stands ignorant
    filled with hatred

    thugged out dudes
    with pants
    sagging

    women of the night
    selling goodies
    to the highest bidder

    On my corner
    churches
    liqure stores
    and pawn shops thrive

    making money
    off of the insulent
    helping in death

    keeping funeral homes
    busy with
    dead bodies

    On my corner
    I wish that hope
    would come

    praying on my knees
    for my fellow man
    hoping dreaming
    of better days
     
  5. spicybrown

    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hott piece poetess...spitting fiya:flame:

    :welldone:

    :picture:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    More than ashame when what should never be seen as common place, is. Thank you for sharing this dose of reality.
     
  7. AppleBottomBird

    AppleBottomBird Member MEMBER

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    Thanks, i will take that and grow...thanks and much love to all... there are alot of corners and too many turned out black corners..
     
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