Black Poetry : My Conclusion

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  1. SoothinDivinity

    SoothinDivinity Active Member MEMBER

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    I've come to a conclusion that may be hard to believe
    Took me so long but now I'm glad I found stability
    You still wonderin what's goin on?
    Don't worry I'm goin to enlighten thee
    With these words that can only be conveyed through poetry.

    I realize that you were tryin to mold me
    Into one of them trendy girls you see on the tv screen
    With the long hair and the light eyes
    But baby see I'm no longer blind to the lines your were feeding me

    I can't be that girl cause I am so much more
    Not that they don't have class but I just realize that showin my a** aint the way to get past
    I have something they can't go buy in the stores.
    Something that can open new doors in a mind that once was so closed.

    I'm never gonna be a size three, four, five or a six cause I got my grandmama's hips
    And my mama big thighs
    And please let's not get on the topic of my butt cause I got enough of that to please a few eyes.

    I know you think you were helping me out
    When you tried to make me into all the things this world cares about
    A young pretty girl with all those material things
    But thank goodness I've come to realize that things can't make me.
    I'm glad I didn't lose me integrity or the smarts that my mama and daddy taught to me.

    I still care about you but I want you to see past all the things that you have given to me
    Look past the Gucci purse and the Louis V
    Come to see everything that makes up whats inside of me.
    Yeah I got a pretty face and my body it's good to look at too
    Even though it aint the exact size that society or you says it should be
    I can't deny that hourglass figures run in my family.

    You so rapped up in being in with the crowd
    That you don't realize you walkin out on your prize
    You losin me slowly whenever you try to throw those material things at me
    Yeah I like lookin good but there has to be more
    I value passion and love more then things we find in the stores or see on tv.

    I'm writin this cause I need you to see
    I know we young but we gotta move on from the those things
    Cause if we don't then they gonna destroy you and me
    We must find security in ourselves not our Fendi

    You used to tell me that you feel in love with me smile
    Now the only time you say I look lovely is when you see me in them designer duds
    I want you to just read this and see what we've come to be
    Cause we are slowly digressing and our love will eventually come to cease
    Then where would either of us be?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep flow and question !
    love the vibe u pose flow on
     
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    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice. we should define ourself threw our outter.. rather than letting it define us....
     
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    Tight write and good message, poet.
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bravo my sister poet...Bravo indeed. :welldone:
     
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    Loved the message and the way it was conveyed. Got to see past the cover to truly understand the book. Flow on, great write!!!
     
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    ...the relationship may be digressing
    but the poet...is not
    "She's growing..."
    or has grown because this poem
    is quite reflective and full of "truths"
    of self love and the difference
    between that...and self sacrafice...

    Love the message in this poem!
    Sage
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    love the message .... very deep scribe

    Peace
    Angel
     
  9. SoothinDivinity

    SoothinDivinity Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks

    Thanks for the support. I'm lovin the site.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad your enjoying the site.

    we also have our very own voice chat as well

    www.destee.com/chat

    please join us sometimes Friday night is poetry throw down

    bring a flow or listen tot he family flow

    again your welcome happy you found us

    Peace
    Angel
     
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