Black Poetry : ...my brother, my brother...

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  1. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My wilden out brother
    Claimin you seems to be a stretch for me
    You rob from
    Your mothers
    Your sisters
    Your fathers
    Your bothers
    Coveting what you believe you need
    As an offering to this new Urban God
    Unforgiving in it’s demands
    And because of your loyalty and faith
    You endanger the existence of
    Your mothers
    Your sisters
    Your fathers
    Your brothers
    Blinded by the brightness of that promising light
    Sparkling off the end of that glass pipe
    Your morality’s collapse
    And left in grief are
    Your mothers
    Your sisters
    Your fathers
    Your brothers
    My wilden out brother
    Lovin you right now is a stretch for me
    Telling you how I feel doesn’t seem to work
    Showing you how I feel doesn’t seem to work
    Shouting how I feel doesn’t seem to work
    Ignoring your creep through my alley only seems to spurn you
    The sweat dripped from your brow
    Exaggerated by the moonlight glow echoes your persistence
    Urging the click-clack of the lock-out by
    Your mothers
    Your sisters
    Your fathers
    Your brothers
    Drilling holes into other’s privacy leveraged by
    The strength of your confused mind state
    Tools of the trade…screwdriver and brut desperation
    Unlatching room for further separation
    And while during those sunlight hours when the money’s spent
    You stoop with head in hands blaming your presence on
    Your mothers
    Your sisters
    Your fathers
    Your brothers

    While all the time we simply pray for you…

    My wilden out brother
    Believing in you right now is a stretch for me..
     
  2. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    FEELIN YA.....I LIKE THIS HEA...KEEP COMIN' W/ IT POET.....
     
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    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was totally depressing, but needed to be said. (I feel like a critic) but I like this flow.
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sad but so often so true
    well spoken
     
  5. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sad...true...

    the sad thing is that my brain has been on hiatus and it took the death of one of my uncles and the robbery of my apt (both this past tues) to drive me to write! it's sometimes strange what moves us....

    thanks so much for your replies!!
     
  6. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I felt dis reality truth u speaketh of......well said
     
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    I'm feeling this piece...I liked the way this flowed....Got the beacon of the Lighthouse shingin on you.
     
  8. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$ & Bishop ~ thanks for checkin this! much love! and thanks Bishop for the shine!!
     
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