Black Poetry : my blues

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  1. KentuckianKween

    KentuckianKween Active Member MEMBER

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    hey folks... i've been strugglin with this ***** known to most as writer's block... it's really kickin my ***... so as a writing exercise, i had my niece write down a few common objects on a few slips of paper... we put em in a hat, she drew blind, and i wrote about it... this is the result:


    "my blues"



    i ain’t never known a man
    that could hold me
    better than my blues...

    my blues
    hug me like
    a second skin
    breathin me
    a second wind
    cradlin broad cinnamon hips and
    protectin edible chocolate thighs
    from reflectin rovin eyes
    talkin’ bout

    “look, brotha
    look
    but don’t touch...”

    my blues
    fit me just fine
    and warm me like
    the gloved hand
    of the Sahara...
    with my hands on my hips i
    strut
    past the nile
    and wink as it waves
    to the sway of my back
    and i
    glide
    past Egypt’s sphinx
    and smile as it shields it eyes
    cause my blues
    are just too bright

    i step carefully
    so my blues don’t fade...

    carefully

    i

    step and

    slide
    into a room
    and let my blues
    take control
    let my backbone slip
    with my hand ‘pon my hips
    and dive into the
    oohhs and aaahhs
    that surround
    the air around
    my aboundin blues
    as they
    tighten their grip
    on my exterior
    and smooth and stroke
    my interior
    as i run my hand
    ‘cross my posterior
    with you watchin me
    lettin your eyes
    accent my low-cut
    high-rise
    tye-dyed blues...

    yeah,

    look, brotha
    look
    but don’t touch...




    the object in question: my favorite jeans :)
    be easy yall... peace...
     
  2. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    kween, gurl, that's a great idea for writer's block. this piece is very nicely written. writer's block?...what writer's block? :)
    keep on scribin', i'm watchin'.


    ~~~inkdrops~~~
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kween

    Looks to me like that wall came down .... and the writer's block that you had -- has crumbled! This piece is very well scribed... I'm lovin' the idea behind it...

    Whateva was blockin' you B4 -- please send it my way so that when my walls come tumblin' down -- my **** will be as explosive as this piece is!

    Well written thought!

    One Luv.
     
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    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yessss! Awesome piece Kween. Thank you and your niece.

    BE
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    writer's block

    phooey
    you just thinking to hard

    if you got writer's block
    then i'm a chinese lady living in Wyoming

    when you get some more of that block
    hit us with some more of your God given talents please


    <DSS>
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    YA BEAT DA ODDS

    BEAUTIFUL FLOW & DISPLAY
    YA BEAT DA ODDS WELCOME
    TO DA WRITERS BLOCK
    BUT U DONE WELL AND WON!!!
     
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