Black Poetry : My Black Rose..... ((New Kid))

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  1. Doryea

    Doryea Member MEMBER

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    My Black Rose

    No one knows I got this black rose in my heart
    But I'm trying to change while stepping forward with a lonely start

    There's so much pain behind this scarred emotionless face
    Hidden deep inside dark gruesome shadows of my inner being
    I pause........ and I think...
    Why am I so angry? How can i be so cold?....I...I..had her...
    And the deeper I think the more tears start to seep behind this emotionless face
    Never to show physically but yet internally destroying me
    If only someone can redeem me from this torture and give me life
    Igniting the spark inside, letting me breathe the freshest air again
    I just want..... I just need to feel the way i used to but I cant
    I feel chained with the things I do and the things I say
    Creating this beast detained deep within the soul of a man
    If only I could cry behind this emotionless face things would seem so clearer
    So I try.... and I close my eyes but nothing
    The pain and sorrow resides still in the control of this beast
    What should I do?... What do I have to fix?
    So many questions overflow in my mind leaving me perplexed and twisted
    I don't even know where to begin, I'm so unsure nowadays
    Inside I'm trying to tie knots and maybe... eventually fuse connections
    But the pieces don't fit
    I'm dealing with the wrong puzzle at the wrong destination
    Yet... in time it seems like I'm moving backwards while stepping forward
    And it's strange because I never thought defeating the past would be so hard
    But as the days grow shorter my nights become more restless
    Only to hate what I see in my dreams
    Torn in between my reality and subconscious I see destiny
    Will I ever be able to reach?
    Or will the beast consume me and I live this life of internal torture?
    They don't know what it feels like, they all say I'm strong but inside I painfully weep
    While I sit, hands holding my head thinking bout my life
    I close my eyes and a tear forms, falling down the left side of my cheek
    I cry.....
    I just cry...

    No one knows I got this black rose in my heart
    But I'm trying to change while stepping forward with a lonely start
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is very good material... I love the form of this New Kid
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of peace & respect
    welcome from above as i bless this wit love

    Tyte drop and on point as the New kid shout it out
    welcome Doryea
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Appreciating the metaphor of the black rose. Such in depth emotions pouring out, bet this piece sounds great spoken. Welcome New Kid, waiting to read more from you.
     
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    choclatangel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well done poet....

    "in time it seems like I'm moving backwards while stepping forward
    And it's strange because I never thought defeating the past would be so hard"

    this is my favorite section, it's so fitting to many situations in life, especially for black people in general...you've given me inspiration for a new flow. Thanks and welcome!
     
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    So sad
    Why you be?
    Did you know you be from greatness...

    Soul strength
    And an apostrophe!

    Blessings... on ya!

    Scribe on...

    -Desert D.
     
  7. Doryea

    Doryea Member MEMBER

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    Thanks ya'll for the feed, I appreciate it

    This was avry emotional piece for me it has to deal with my fiancee and I and some things we goin through right now and many other situations I'm dealing with...

    anyway more to come
     
  8. truetothecause

    truetothecause Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you and Well....Come!

    Let's see...just a couple things I'd like you
    to BE ...aware of from M.E.

    1. Welcome to the forum called Destee.com
    2. Thank You for sharing apart of thee which is a RE~flection of me...for in so DO~ing you have supported OUR Unity
    3. Let them flow, let them flow, let them flow.....as they provide you the water for which to grow....and just so you all know....I'm referring to the WORD, Sound and Power inherent in every Black Rose...
    4. I have a sneaky suspicion you ain't a "new kid" at all...as your Ancient-cy has been RE~vealed with this glorious call....ing out to US all...sharing....caring ...and daring
     
  9. Versatile

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    welcome...this was a tight drop...i really felt it
     
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