Black Poetry : Muse

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Jun 6, 2004.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If you were my eyes
    You would envision streams
    of mahogany and stardust dreams
    adrift in the air, or so it seems.
    If you could be my hands
    You would feel the satiny touch
    of creamy skin melting as I clutch
    what I long to savor oh ... so much
    For to be my heart
    You would be swept away
    in the pulsating frenzy every day
    your spirit enters my realm this way
    As a momentary replacement for my mind
    Awestruck you would be to find
    that waiting for our next chapter to unwind
    is torture of the most unspeakable kind
    All of this you would know
    If you could step inside of me
    and experience how my soul has been
    captured inside this muse of poetry.
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So much food for thought...and as I was reading this, I tried to picture someone being my heart, only for a second. For the tenderness that it hold...will melt the entire universe. I like this piece so much because I can surely feel where you're comming from...5^ for this...it caught me.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice srcibe....
    speakin from within
    likes
    thanks for sharing.....Angel
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love your responses, queentswana. Your take on being someone's heart...lets me know that you truly feel what I was trying to convey, thank you. And I just read your collab with keita in the poetry slam winners' forum, I'm still sitting here with my mouth agape over that one....
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks blkangel for responding so.
     
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    Gread pen'n my sister open up your soul and let it flow into us. :toast:
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Not my soul exactly, caramelpython, but some thoughts none the less, thanks for your response on this piece.
     
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    Ah, another wonderful journey into the mind of sister watzinaname. You always take me on the back streets of the city that I haven't been on before, and show me flowers I didn't even know existed. Bless you.
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well, gempis your response was like poetry. If one person can walk into the words and see beauty in it, then this piece has served its purpose. Thanks much sis.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    their is no question you can write
    no question you can flow
    no question that you take me high
    into that beautiful below..
    tis always wonderful to read you
    to feel y ou
    thank you..
    for being...
     
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