Black Poetry : Murder

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by amberly, Feb 15, 2003.

  1. amberly

    amberly Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    1st Degree Murder

    A premeditated act of malice
    He attacked my words
    Stabbed my verbs,
    Shot my nouns
    Sliced my adjectives into syllables
    Causing me to st st stutter
    Pushed my self-esteem over the bridge
    It couldn't swim,
    The rhythm of the waves were too brutal,
    Drowning me in my own insecurities
    Am I good enough?
    What?
    When?
    How?
    And who cares?
    If I'm living or dead
    Pierced into my cerebrum,
    Impregnated my mentality with conjunctions,
    My brain gave birth to separated prepositions
    Adverbs were infected,
    Cancerous pronouns were detected
    Suffocating me with grammatical errors
    Gasping for air
    My vowels were muffled
    A and E were silent
    Consonants were broke like I, O, U
    My thoughts were conquered
    Murdered in the first degree


    (c)2002amberly
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    American Idol

    Feeling this as well- "Everybody is ignorant... only on different subjects"- (Will Rogers)

    1poetsought
     
  3. msluciousb

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    Never worry about what other's think...

    Shame on the man who made you feel unworthy, or inadequate, shame on those who don't recognize your genius and uncompromising standards.
    "What other's think about us, is rarely ever as important as what we think of ourselves" unknown
    "As a man thinketh so shall he be!" It's in the "BOOK"
    "You are fearfully and wonderfully made by God..." Know that!
    Blessings On Ya House
    Keep scribing like ya do, cause nobody knows but you!
    Blessings On Ya House!
     
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    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very cleverly done! You know you got skillz!
    Don't let no one tell you different!
     
  5. Sista_Gurl

    Sista_Gurl Active Member MEMBER

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    dont let anyone mess with your mentalilty beacuse then they will conquer a great mind and soul speak life into the ears in your reach and in the sound of your voice and write the life that your soul sings everyday.
    this is how i feel every day
    sista gurl
     
  6. epiphany

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    Amberly,

    Lovin what you have done
    with the vocabulary...
    but, the content here is
    so profound of how damaging
    words can be.....Excellent Scribe Poet!

    Epiphany :heart:
     
  7. poeticdelight

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    talented sister

    welcome amberly :wave:

    keep writing :)

    pd
     
  8. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Excellent read!


    souldeep!
    Coco
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