Poetry Critiques : MURDA MODE

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  1. One9_Arch

    One9_Arch Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I say the devil deserves to be
    stoned by the plans of Man
    go in 2 murda mode and-->
    murda my foes on advance.​

    Like beastly primitives
    2 da slaughter they dance
    thinkin' good where the peace been broken
    hopin' all ends well enough to keep on floatin'
    it's been Spoken! [ASA]​
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Let peace erase every negative thought therein, locking the door to evil. Such food for positive thought poet.
     
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    it rhymes but i'm not sure of the meaning behind the lines...
    should the devil go into murda mode or is that a statement for you?
    in short pieces like this you have to be clear with the reader or be abstract with the reader...either way, the lines must flow together without being disjointed...

    one love
    khasm
     
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    love the style here and the concept just clear who's in da mode yaself or da devil
     
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    bringing this one back up
     
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