Black Poetry : moving...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Dec 7, 2003.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    moving from one day into another
    quietly quickly
    can't always tell when wednesday becomes thrusday
    Becomes thursday
    after l2 moving into one
    ain't that crazy
    i need lite...can't see the line to write.
    cat purrs...it ain't your purr
    motor churns...it ain't your motor
    Thinking bout
    You
    walking the steellike edge of life...trying to widen it's blade
    You
    pushing through around striving to be beautiful folk
    connecting with those who are
    You
    Breathed on me..
    made me feel the hairs..
    growing!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    always a new day
    i likes
    nice write...
    flow on:angel1:
     
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    Liked the way you captured the feeling of constant motion regardless of what else life brings...nice.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    captured so sweetly
    the purr not your but
    the motor running but
    not your motor ....this here took me in !!
     
  5. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    looking at my life here at destee...i see that i did not acknowledge and thank you myblkangel, watzinaname and $$rich$$..for your support and encouragement with this piece...i was still very young here and was moving quite fast..but i thank you now...no question twas/is people like you that keep me coming back..
    mucho respect
    deepy
     
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    This leaves me reeling with its depth, sister. Nice work.
     
  7. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    wow..gempis.
    when I got notification on my email..i said "i have a poem i called moving"..
    thanks for bringing it up..not only to destee...but to me..
    and most of all...thanks for seeing the "layers" inside of it..
     
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    I never saw this... this is a great explanation of perpetual motion. More flows lke this, please. :)
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    you said it toylin..peaceful and unpeaceful..
    thanks for support
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    toylin...how you got peaceful and unpeaceful i don't understand...cause that was my response to you re my piece"chillin in the park"..
    and yet..this is definitely about flowing...movement...thanks for the support..it must have been a tuesday moving into friday kind of nite when i responded.. : :bam: :grin: :juggle: :luvu:
     
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