Black Poetry : Moving On

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by phenomenalwoman, Jul 27, 2006.

  1. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Release...
    Relax...
    Move on
    The day is done
    Watch as the sun
    Goes...
    Down
    Down
    Down
    It burns no more
    No less
    Then the first time around
    You've been there
    Done that
    And told the tale a time or two
    Belittling him
    No...belittling you
    For what?
    It's O-V-E-R
    Over
    The day is done
    Relax...
    Tell it to the sun
    Watch as it
    Goes
    Down
    Down
    Down
    Watch as it's
    Released....
    O-V-E-R
    Over
    Moving on
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    To everything there is a season, even when we don't understand the reason. Even a good change can be painful at first, because we tend to resist that which is foreign. I'm diggin this well written vibe, and so happy to read you again. Welcome back.
     
  3. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey Watz, thanks for commenting. I don't seem to be around much anymore, but I'm working on that. This was more of a reflective piece than anything, just kinda flowed.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Feeln' this flo.
    Sometime we dont know
    when its time to let go
    and realize its O-V-E-R.

    Flo on my sista.
     
  5. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks 4everluv, I am glad you felt me on that. Sometimes we hold on to things rather then moving on.
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love it when I read something that speaks to my situation. I had to reread this today becuase it was speaking to me. Excellent flo cuz!!! :welldone:
     
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    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I must say the sunset is a great metaphor for "moving on" The sun setting as the release and the sunrise as a rebirth. This was genious! Write On!
     
  8. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks asimplepoet, I am glad it spoke to you. That really means a lot to hear, that I was able to reach you in that way.
    Thanks T-E, it is symbolic of where I am in my life right now. I loved the way you interpreted it.
     
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    sonnee01 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    phenomenalwoman...watch out now.. you said a mouth full.... I like it.. I like it.. I like it. Keep it movin huh...no need to dwell...FRESH starts are always a good thang. I needed this read today....thank you!!!
     
  10. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks sonnee01, I this piece was able to reach you. We just gotta keep it moving.
     
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